Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school leavers in most countries (school leavers are young people who leave school without going onto further studies). How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?
It is a common opinion that all young people, left school refusing to continue further education, are doomed to become jobless. This essay will provide a strong response why this problem is not the only one of the issueS, which graduates are facing currently.
Admittedly, people tend to judge that the major factor for success life is a proper education which leads to the greatER career prospects. Nevertheless, there are so many examples about successful people who never graduated college namely Steve Jobs and Sir Richard Branson, so university’s degree does not guarantee a remedy FOR the unemployment among the youth. Moreover, students are bound to suffer with SOMEWHAT sheer pressure of the studying, especially in prestigious academies and finally give up the efforts to finish them.
On the other hand, It might be THAT a number of other challenges for the youngsters, such as THE hazard of commiting a suicide and drug addiction that are more important to be solved in society. Many, even developed, countries have still saved the high rate of depression and suicide AMONG individuals under 20 years old. In addition parentAL expectations REGARDING educational attainment of the kids exacerbates SUCH STUDENTS’ well-being and contributes to the CONSEQUENT self-destruction. This appears to BE demonstrateD in universal abuse among the youngers of the psychoactive or recreational drugs as mephedrone and amphetamine. Hence, they prefer to escape from the reality and exasperating demands of the social environment via substances and death ATTEMPTS . In this case joblessness may becomes just a part of the whole picture of — psychological conditions of the modern youngsters, whereas the reasons of the issue lay more deeply.
It is logical to conclude that unavailability of getting a job for — young adultS still stays a sufficient concern for the community, despite of this, if we decided the question of the youth’s well-being, this problem WOULD NOT EXIST ON A VAST SCALE.
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- The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. How far do you agree with this prediction? 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, well, whereas, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36163522013 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13713079214 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660377358491 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.9274425729 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.083333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131538580778 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393116915505 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352341473704 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749048550524 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347643193313 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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