Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Word Count: 344
With the rapid development of class="our">our cyberspace, class="there">there are increasing number of class="children">children who are addicted to the class="internet">internet. Every day they class="spend">spend an astronomical amount of class="time">time on class="cell">cell class="phone">phone, class="social">social networking website and bask in the world of online games. On the other hand, class="there">there are also strong evidences showing class="that">that the class="internet">internet technology class="have">have a positive impact on the education of juveniles, given class="that">that they class="make">make the study more convenient and create a more flexible schedule. however, I strongly hold the class="idea">idea class="that">that for young class="student">student, this kind of technology wouldn’t be suitable, and educating class="them">them class="is">is a more challenging task class="than">than class="it">it in the past.
First and the foremost, through class="some">some people claim class="that">that using class="internet">internet technology in class to create a digital class can class="have">have many benefits, I must say class="that">that the electronic devices might distract the concertation of students. if they class="student">student had the ability to access the class="internet">internet for learning material by their tablet or class="cell">cell class="phone">phone, class="that">that they could access any websites in class. Therefore, instead of using their ipad as a learning tool, they are more likely to use class="them">them as their gaming devices and chatting rooms. Moreover, since class="it">it class="is">is almost impossible for teachers to supervise class="that">that activities on their screen, the whole class will end up in a mess.
Furthermore, the fact class="that">that class="children">children always don’t class="have">have the capability of self-control indicates class="that">that they are more likely to addicted to online games. For instance, class="there">there class="is">is a prevalent game named Grand Auto Five in where you can do any criminals you want, such as killing people, stealing cars or even using heavy weapons to fight against the police. such violent game class="is">is quite attractive to juveniles especially to boys. Thus, they tend to class="spend">spend as mush class="time">time as they can on this game. Under this circumstance, class="it">it would be entirely impossible for class="them">them to focus on their academic issues. my friend Li class="is">is a victim of this games, he used to play almost 7 hours per day and turn a blind eye on his teacher’s advices. As a result, his failed in the most pivotal university entrance exams. he would class="have">have a brighter future if such games had not appear in class="our">our world.
Finally, I want to confess class="that">that cyber technology does class="have">have many benefits for the education of class="children">children. The advent of the class="internet">internet makes class="it">it possible for students in deprived places to enjoy the same education quality in the rich regions, since they can access the online classroom wherever they are. And class="some">some educational games can ignite the enthusiasm of the class="children">children towards learning. however, class="our">our education system class="is">is not well-prepared for the coming of these technologies.
In a nutshell, I maintain the class="idea">idea the class="it">it class="is">is more difficult to educate the students class="than">than in the past, sine they class="spend">spend more class="time">time on class="cell">cell phones, online games and class="social">social websites. And I believe class="that">that my opponents will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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- Tpo 32 2 3
- TPO 25 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO 34Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on a cell phone online games and social networking Web site Use specific reasons and exam 70
- The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. 71
- TPO 36-Independent- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...technology in class to create a digital class can class='have'>have many...
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Suggestion: If
... distract the concertation of students. if they class='student'>stude...
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Message: Did you mean 'classes'?
Suggestion: classes
...eover, since class='it'>it class='is'>is almost impossible ...
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...most pivotal university entrance exams. he would class='have'>have a ...
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Suggestion: appeared
...a brighter future if such games had not appear in class='our'>our world. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4226.0 1977.66487455 214% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 8.50301810865 4.8611393121 175% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.36224244215 2.67179642975 350% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527162977867 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1154.7 618.680645161 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.3 1.51630824373 152% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 32.0 9.59856630824 333% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 94.934742702 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.090909091 100.406767564 191% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5909090909 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68181818182 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0242162118872 0.236089414692 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0183475610818 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0184161368691 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0224826556039 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00674468081275 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.9 11.7677419355 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.07 58.1214874552 -17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 10.1575268817 198% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 32.32 10.9000537634 297% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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