"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
With the information provided, this assumption leading to conclusion remains unfounded. This argument is well presented yet far-fetched. The author of the statement claims that Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the-job accident which asleep and fatigue is a pivotal factor for this event. This conclusion is ill-founded.
The primary assumption underlying the author's conclusion is that fatigue and asleep has a significant effect in job accident. Nevertheless, he fails to preclude other possibility reason that it could be multiple aspects such as lack of experience, degree of their skill. Want of such prudent answers to make the author of the statement full of holes. So, to reinforce the argument the author of the statement should have discussed about other reasons for accident in job which is considerably vital.
Furthermore, the author of the statement avers that to decline the number of accident at Quiot and increasing productivity and efficiency, we ought to diminish each of our three work shift by one hour fewer. As a matter of fact should get sufficient of sleep without a shadow of doubt. Indeed, the author cannot assert that there is a strong correlation between amount of sleep and accident. In fact, the author claims that one hour shorter work shift; it does not mean employee would sleep one more hour. Perhaps employee would utilize this one hour to entertain or have a party. So, to reinforce the argument the author should have provided about detail of this one hour, which this hour should allocate amusement or other activities.
Moreover, the author of the statement assumes that Panoply have greatly outcome. Without considering and ruling other possible reason into account that it might be possible better safe training and alarm system. It might be that worker in Panoply industries have safe consciousness. By considering this fact, comparing two cities is not valid. S, to reinforce the argument the author should have provided information about Panophy employee which has an indispensable criterion for decline accident in the setting job.
In short, as discussed, the author of the statement should have other aspects for declining accident such as alarming system and a variety item such as their experience, skill, knowledge and so forth. Besides, diminishing one hour fewer is not a sole reason for this challenge. On the other hand to make a rigid conclusion is very myopic observation method. This conclusion cannot be tenable. After all, feckless attempt with a fallible method could be noting a fool's errand.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... The primary assumption underlying the authors conclusion is that fatigue and asleep h...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...our three work shift by one hour fewer. As a matter of fact should get sufficient ...
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Line 12, column 463, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fools'' or 'fool's'?
Suggestion: fools'; fool's
...ith a fallible method could be noting a fools errand.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, after all, in fact, in short, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24396135266 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77526981931 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487922705314 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5012707451 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4583333333 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146639054773 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428884844904 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614686771836 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852909479404 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442073101008 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.