Some people argue that technological inventions such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive Do you agree or disagree

Submitted by Kapu1456 on Sat, 02/08/2020 - 07:52

Recent times the usage of smart phones have been escalated due to rapid advancement in communication technologies. Nowadays all the people from kids to elderly people spend their most of the time on mobile phones. In this scenario, many people opine that children should use this technology for their progress. However, others do not think so.Let us discuss both the points.

To begin with, there have been many advantages noted by using this smart gadget. Firstly, today's children have become more smart as compared to two
generations before children. They can forecast the future, whether there will be rain today or not by just typing few words on Google. Secondly, Children do not have to attend all the classes and lectures in their schools. They can learn whatever the subjects they want to learn by using YOUTUBE on their smart phones. Hence they have become self dependent. Moreover, they do not have to buy all subjects' books,as they can download the contents from Internet so that mobile phones can also be helpful to them financially. Apart from this, this reduces their wastage of time and this time can be utilized for other recreational activities.

On the other hand, some people hold different stand on using of mobile phones for children. They believe that excessive usage of mobile phones can damage their mental as well as physical ability to learn something new. Their grasping power can be reduced hence their exam grades and performance will be affected adversely. Furthermore, many children play video games all the time and this has led to some serious crimes among the kids.
As an illustration, according to the report of Concordia University, there have been 7 out of 10 children suffering from depression and anger due to playing PUBG like games on mobile phones. Additionally,suicidal cases have also been increased among children from last 10 years. This indicates very serious issue in today's society.

Conclusively, mobile phones have their pros and cons. Advantages outweigh disadvantages. I personally believe that smart phones are the immense source of knowledge for students. It can bring lots of
awareness in the society if it is used in the most profound way. It is recommended that children must avoid overuse of electronic gadgets as they can harm their eye sights.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...days all the people from kids to elderly people spend their most of the time on m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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..., many people opine that children should use this technology for their progress. ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Let
...ogress. However, others do not think so.Let us discuss both the points. To begi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Secondly, Children do not have to attend all the classes and lectures in their sc...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...by using YOUTUBE on their smart phones. Hence they have become self dependent. Moreov...
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Suggestion: , as
...ey do not have to buy all subjects books,as they can download the contents from Int...
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Line 6, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mobile phones for children. They believe that excessive usage of mobile phones ca...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tal as well as physical ability to learn something new. Their grasping power can ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , suicidal
...ike games on mobile phones. Additionally,suicidal cases have also been increased among ch...
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Line 10, column 163, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesights'.
Suggestion: eyesights
...ectronic gadgets as they can harm their eye sights.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67282932873 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536842105263 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2982982652 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8333333333 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112188170559 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381396300667 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550588549656 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614699545875 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626774577905 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...days all the people from kids to elderly people spend their most of the time on m...
^^
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., many people opine that children should use this technology for their progress. ...
^^
Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Let
...ogress. However, others do not think so.Let us discuss both the points. To begi...
^^^
Line 4, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Secondly, Children do not have to attend all the classes and lectures in their sc...
^^
Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...by using YOUTUBE on their smart phones. Hence they have become self dependent. Moreov...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 413, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...ey do not have to buy all subjects books,as they can download the contents from Int...
^^^
Line 6, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mobile phones for children. They believe that excessive usage of mobile phones ca...
^^
Line 6, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tal as well as physical ability to learn something new. Their grasping power can ...
^^
Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , suicidal
...ike games on mobile phones. Additionally,suicidal cases have also been increased among ch...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 163, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesights'.
Suggestion: eyesights
...ectronic gadgets as they can harm their eye sights.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67282932873 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536842105263 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2982982652 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8333333333 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112188170559 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381396300667 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550588549656 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614699545875 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626774577905 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.