The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The memo from vice president of company Sartorian which manufactures men's clothing states that they had discontinued alpaca overcoat five years ago as they were finding difficulties in obtaining supplies of high quality wool fabric, but author is asserting that the they should start its production again as they got new fabric supplier who can supply them wool fabric. And author is also assuming that it will be more profitable than earlier as overall prices in clothing have increased and also because at the time of discontinuation many customers had demand for it. To reach the conclusion that starting manufacturing alpaca overcoat again will be more profitable, author has relied on various assumptions. That assumptions might be not reliable in today's situation. The various possible assumptions are mentioned in subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, the author has mentioned that they have new fabric supplier, but as author has mentioned that five years ago they had stopped production as no reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, but here author has failed to explain the quality of wool fabric by new supplier. It might happen that new supplier doesn't have high quality wool fabric. As the author is arguing to increase the profit of company but it may be the case that prices of wool fabric are set very high by new supplier, thus it might not increase their overall profit margin. Hence, author should mention the quality and price of wool fabric supplied by new supplier.
Secondly, the author has is expecting the great demand of alpaca coats considering the fact that there was outcry by their customers at a time of discontinuation of alpaca coat. But also mentioned in memo the aplaca coats were discontinued five years back, and it might be possible that fashion and trend have changed in five years, as result there might not be great demand for aplaca coat. Also it is mentioned that there was not competitors offer a comparable product at that time, but it might be possible that today plenty of such products are available from various manufacturers. Thus, author cannot rely only on the demand five years ago, they need to consider current scenario and demand before making such decision.
Finally, author had mentioned that overall increase in clothing prices will make Sarorian's alpaca coats more profitable than ever before, but here overall increase in clothing prices doesn't mean that clothes made from wool have also increased.
Thus author should consider all the assumptions mentioned above and should give proper explanations.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2115 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.036 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.564 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...ol fabric, but author is asserting that the they should start its production again as th...
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Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...it will be more profitable than earlier as overall prices in clothing have increas...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lier. It might happen that new supplier doesnt have high quality wool fabric. As the a...
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Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ht not be great demand for aplaca coat. Also it is mentioned that there was not comp...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ere overall increase in clothing prices doesnt mean that clothes made from wool have a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16746411483 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61461255351 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.0536865475 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312097992953 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10832527287 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102927147511 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157897606477 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115972312239 0.0628817314937 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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