Some people believe that music should be taught in school, while others think that it's better to focus on computer and science.
Do you agree or disagree?
Music provides a person with the rhythm that he/she needs in his/her life. It is argued by a segment of society that schools should focus on music as it aids to relieve a child's stress; however, the other segment is of the belief that more attention must be paid to computer and science being the hit subjects of today's era. As per my perspective, all of them play their own role in a child's life.
Proponents of music claim that it is the best way to sense relief from stress and anxiety for children. This is to say that children are overloaded with academic studies which make them suffer under a lot of pressure; thus any sort of music might act as a saviour by providing them with a little stress-free time from their studies. Children, to exemplify, not only tend to enjoy such activities but also perform better in their academics as they feel rejuvenated. In contrast, music could not help them to secure a job in future.
Others in favour of computer and science argue that it is undeniably true that both of these are the most developing fields in recent times. In other words, a plethora of job opportunities are still available, and certainly will rise in coming decades; hence it is best to focus on these core subjects in the school curriculum to promise them a financially secured future. Most of the students, to illustrate, prefer to graduate in computer and science nowadays owing to increasing job availabilities in these areas. Nevertheless, it cannot be denied that it might be difficult to cope up for children if they have too much pressure on their shoulders to excel in one or two main subjects.
In conclusion, although music helps children in relieving their stress from studies, subjects like computer and science are a gateway to a lucrative job; nonetheless, I believe if children were given a chance to make a balance between arts and academic subjects such as science and computer, they would certainly not only enjoy their childhood but also would have a secured future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76790830946 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65721581517 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541547277937 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0310105151 49.4020404114 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.666666667 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0833333333 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18229730716 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646658704857 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576116868309 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113670290288 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494628600405 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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