Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.in return for the millions of dollars that they are paidwe should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibilty.-write a response in which discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
Stars are indisputably icon for the whole world either it is spots stars or movie stars.They are quintessentially of our various activities and social responsibilities.As they are elligible for that position the normal public surmise them as superstar,role model etc.They are paid a huge amount og money so people expect the maximum good behaviour,social activities,responsibilites.To maintain the emperial of media they have to compromise about many things,also a routine work.Besides their job they have a another world,where they are very much important.
Stars are beholden to their judge, i mean public.There are some criteria have to be maintained by them.For example, they have to be confident,trustworthy,truthful. But sometimes, they behave like they are obdurate, untrustworthy, deceitful, liar, capricious, arrogant, jealousy, impatient etc. Sometimes htey are contentious and sometimes they failed to have self-restraint and sexual chastity.They have to concious about dress also. Media,whatever it is press media or virtual media theyalways make a trap to grab them so that those behaviour sometimes disclosed infront of the world.In olympic games, stars have to be careful because some people take illegal way so that they perform very well lile they take energatic drinks or alcohol type drinks.But obviously they are caught red handed in dope test.So that he or she becomes revoked for olympic.Celebreties life is full of name and fame.Some times they behave like enigmatic.Some movie stars opress with some animals & so they are indicted.
As they are paid millions of dollars they have to fulfill social responsibilities.Some celebreties arrange a charity show instead of taking money,some stars do some advertisement so that people are aware from smoking.Some build an institution whether it is educational instituiton like school-college or it is hospital.Some stars build organization like anti-cancer or opthalmological institute.
Finally, it is very important to behave like stars as they are super model,role model.icon to the whole world as they are paid a big amount.The big amount of budget of economy is in their home so it is surely to behave like icon to us.
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- Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.in return for the millions of dollars that they are paidwe should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibilty.-write a response in whi 60
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Sentence: Stars are
Sentence: Stars are indisputably icon for the whole world either it is spots stars or movie stars.
Description: The fragment indisputably icon for is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and spots
Sentence: Besides their job they have a another world, where they are very much important.
Description: The token a is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, singular
Suggestion: Refer to a and another
Sentence: As they are elligible for that position the normal public surmise them as superstar,role model etc. They are paid a huge amount og money so people expect the maximum good behaviour, social activities, responsibilites.
Error: elligible Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: responsibilites Suggestion: responsibilities
Sentence: To maintain the emperial of media they have to compromise about many things, also a routine work.
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Sentence: But sometimes, they behave like they are obdurate, untrustworthy, deceitful, liar, capricious, arrogant, jealousy, impatient etc.Sometimes htey are contentious and sometimes they failed to have self-restraint and sexual chastity.They have to concious about dress also.
Error: concious Suggestion: conscious
Error: self-restraint Suggestion: self restraint
Sentence: Media,whatever it is press media or virtual media theyalways make a trap to grab them so that those behaviour sometimes disclosed infront of the world.
Error: behaviour Suggestion: behavior
Error: infront Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: theyalways Suggestion: therapy
Sentence: In olympic games, stars have to be careful because some people take illegal way so that they perform very well lile they take energatic drinks or alcohol type drinks.
Error: energatic Suggestion: energetic
Error: lile Suggestion: like
Sentence: Some movie stars opress with some animals & so they are indicted.
Error: indicted Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: opress Suggestion: press
Sentence: As they are paid millions of dollars they have to fulfill social responsibilities.Some celebreties arrange a charity show instead of taking money, some stars do some advertisement so that people are aware from smoking.Some build an institution whether it is educational instituiton like school-college or it is hospital.
Error: instituiton Suggestion: institution
Error: celebreties Suggestion: celebrities
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No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1804 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.97 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.843 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.724 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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