Some people think that the automobile caused serious problems. What is your opinion?
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that a major breakthrough was made in transportation by the advent of the automobile. This invention has helped people in recent decades to reach remote destinations as fast as possible. As a result, great automobile companies were established to satisfy the increasing demand, and until today, they are still competing to supply high-quality automobiles. As any product automobiles also have merits and demerits. Many people think that their merits are more than their demerits while others believe that it has caused serious problems for modern people. As far as I am concerned, automobiles have many disadvantages causing abundant problems for humans and nature. I am going to elaborate on my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, overusing automobiles is one of the factors causing air pollution. It has been proved by recent scientific researches that combusted gasses in an automobile engine pollutes the atmosphere. This pollution alters humans' and animals' life. Recent research claims that more than one over five cases of death in Tehran were related to air pollution disease. Many diseases, including breathing problems, asthma, and lung cancer, are the effect of harsh air pollution, especially in urban areas. Not only does air pollution affect the human’s health conditions, but also it changes nature and climate. Acidic rain and global warming are excellent examples illustrating the detrimental effect of air pollution. Thus, automobiles can adjust human life by causing fatal diseases and doing environmental damages.
The second reason is the heavy traffic caused by automobiles in large cities has disturbed many people. Since automobiles have provided an effortless way for transportation, many people started to use them widely. As a result, automobiles spread throughout the world immediately. Nowadays, traffic is one of the modern human’s issues, and people in large cities have been suffering from this problem since the automobiles’ advent. Moreover, every individual wastes a lot of time in traffic and could not complete their daily works. As a personal experience, two years ago, I had to be several days in a hospital to help my mother recover after her surgery. Once I noticed that the doctors are discussing a patient who had expired just a few moments after he arrived at the hospital. One of them was claiming that he had been stuck in traffic for more than two hours. Had he got to the hospital sooner, he might have been alive now.
To wrap it up, I believe that despite their great benefits, automobiles have made serious problems for modern humans, due to two crucial reasons; air pollution and traffic. To surmount these problems we can use other ways of transportation like bus, subway, etc.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
..., it is established beyond doubt that a major breakthrough was made in transportation by the adven...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ooner, he might have been alive now. To wrap it up, I believe that despite th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, still, thus, while, as a result, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24222222222 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88017917824 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564444444444 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0591400624 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7307692308 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73076923077 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213336467667 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545159230925 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588803530574 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132499075512 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637900309376 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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