Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.
Undoubtedly, acquiring assistance from parents to make decisions may be very beneficial to children since their parents have more social experiences and are more sophisticated. However, overly depending on parents, juveniles will lose a precious ability of making options on their own and lose independence. Therefore, I could hardly agree more with the idea that parents are supposed to allow children to make their own options rather than determine everything for them, the reasons on which will be illustrated as follows.
Initially, encouraging children to make their own choice is conducive to children’s personal development . For one thing, it will enable juveniles to be independent. Without their parents’ assistance, children have to put their own current situation concerning their age, ability and experiences into consideration. Gradually, a comprehended and systematic decision-making method will be formed. As a result, confronting any obstacles , children will have the ability to figure them out independently and do not tend to ask for assistance from others. Hence, allowing children to make choices enable them to be independent. For another, it will hone their time-management skills. If juveniles are told to make their own choices, for instance, what to do in the next a few weeks, they need to decide what to do and not to do. Moreover, prioritizing tasks and allocating time properly are also demanded. Therefore, encouraging children to make their own choices will cultivate their time-management skills which plays a pivotal role in their future life.
In addition, to motivate juveniles to decide on their own will pave the way for their future career. When children are allowed to make their own choices, they are more likely to put their inclination into consideration, which is of great importance. A case in point is Leonardo Da Vinci who is a master in the artistic history. His father did not determine his son’s future and told him to just decide what to learn and occupy on himself. As a result, Vinci engaged himself in painting and Architecture owing to his intense inclination of geometry. Eventually, he became one of the most prestigious artists in the art history. Such unprecedented success attributes to his father’s sensible educational approach. On the contrary, if his father compulsively required him to do academic research rather than refer to Vinci’s inclination, we may lose an opportunity to appreciate various masterpieces of him.
In a nutshell, based on my own experiences and social demands, I tend to believe that parents should motivate their kids to make choices on their o
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result, for one thing, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32219570406 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15158848397 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510739856802 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0830592825 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.363636364 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.567233260127 0.236089414692 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160474298653 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141540880349 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352028933552 0.150856017488 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907959591904 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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