People should know events happening around the world even if they have little influence on their daily lives.
Undoubtedly, paying no attention to the events which do not have an immediate impact on our lives may save our time to do other more crucial things. However, we will lose a precious opportunity to broaden our horizon. Therefore, I could hardly agree more with the statement that people should know events happening around the world even if they are not relative to our daily lives, the reasons for which would be illustrated as follows.
Initially, learning about events happening all over the world have several merits for our study and work. For one thing, it will improve our academic performance. If we follow the latest news happening in the global world, even though they seem to have little influence on our daily lives, our interests will be triggered to learn more knowledge in a broader domain. The news concerning economy, military and politics would motivate us to do more academic research in various area. As a result, our academic performance will be improved. For another, it will lay a solid foundation for our future career. To state it more clearly, the current corporations require employees to have a good command of various expertise such as knowing policies in different countries and financial trends in international capital market. Hence, if we could learn more about what is happening around the world, we would obtain more precious working expertise and experiences. In this way, we will win more competitiveness, which paves the way for our future career. Therefore, only with the help of knowledge of the world events, can I enjoy such merits.
In addition, knowing about events happening around the world enables us to maintain a life-long relationship with our friends and make new acquaintance with others. Watching televisions and reading newspapers make us have more common topics with our friends. Hence, the relationship would be maintained. For instance, I am keen on reading news about NBA sports events. During lunch time I could share such things like which basketball player is more skillful or which sports team ranks higher with my friends. Gradually, more classmates are willing to join us and talk with us. Therefore, I make more friends and enlarge my social circle. On the contrary, if I don’t pay attention to the NBA sports events, I would just enjoy my lunch without talking with my fellows, it is hard for me to make new acquaintance as well as maintain relationship with them. In conclusion, but for the help of knowing the international events, I would not have established such a close rapport with my friends.
In a nutshell, based on my own experiences and social demands , I tend to believe that people should know events happening around the world even if they are not relative to our daily lives.
- Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams 76
- Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does 85
- Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children s future for them 76
- You have long been friend with someone If they do something that you don t like should you still be friends with him or her 70
- People should know events happening around the world even if they have little influence on their daily lives 87
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, for one thing, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99350649351 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73721439475 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2950444384 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.304347826 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0869565217 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82608695652 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248419838453 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724906679117 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110187667627 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220316920802 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117602492763 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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