Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the pos

Social media has been encouraging young people to pursue a lucrative job, and those people who have earned a high salary job, they joined the trend and posted more pictures about how their life looks awesome. Thus, young people become less patient working towards a long term goal. They cling to have rewards immediately and proactively. While it is not unreasonable that people would chase a short term goal, sometimes the long run, even though more arduous, juicer fruits can be harvested.

Some industries are famous for how much one can earn immediately if he or she joins, while certain industries are essential, but not instantly rewarding, will atrophy. For example, the advance of science has been pushing the whole world forward. Scientists gain fame, huge salary rewards once they made progress, but such development cannot be accomplished without years of effort. Noble Prizes almost always being awarded to people around sixty to eighty years old. More importantly, some of their names are long-lasting even hundreds of years after they passed away. Newton, who found gravity, Tesla, who established a connection between electricity and magnetization, and Galieo, who claimed the Earth is not center of the world, are remembered by students who have learned fundamental physics. Consider the name of riches, does anyone remember who the wealthiest person in Medival is? What about in 19 century?

The reward of a short-run job has been extravagated by social media and flamboyant people. Such a situation almost always comes with uncertainty and instability. The pictures were posted when those people got the money, but no words would be told when they are struggling. The mismatch of information represents viewers a misconception that chasing short turn profit will lead to long term satisfaction of material. While it's possible that some talented people can promulgate such a short-turn advantage, for most commons, the chance would not be available. Notwithstanding having the shining examples, the failed followers are completely forgotten.

Therefore, despite the inclination of chasing immediate fame and recognition, young people should stay on a track that enables the viability of a long term reward. Although short term job appears from time to time, one should keep in mind that the availability of short term lucrative jobs can vanish at any time, and he or she should keep a vision for future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26804123711 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77001791619 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600515463918 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.8118357946 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164266631183 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047718701801 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456018801328 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108046670095 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043789512769 0.0667264976115 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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