Together with the improvement in society, it seems evident that most of the people are using the money they earned to buy whatever they want. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is beneficial for people to use the money they earned or save them for later in the future. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their own merits to boast, if forced choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with using the money they earned which I will explain the reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, individuals should spend the money they earned because they worked really hard to obtain it. To be specific individuals are exposed to harsh and stressful working environments because of the competitive world which makes them tired and exhausted. Should employees spend the money they earned, they are able to indulge in things they want to purchase which gives them a great deal of satisfaction and fulfillment. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. 3 years ago, when I was part-timer as a waiter in a cafe near-by my house, I earned $1000 dollars a month and I will immediately spend the money once I receive the salary from my boss. I spent the money buying expensive clothes, foods, and gifts for my family. Although I faced a lot of difficulties while working, enjoying the money I earned gave me a rewarding achievement. It becomes clear with this example that workers should spend the money they earned to feel entertained by using it.
Moreover, spending the money a person earns can make him or her happy because when they are spending the money to buy the things they want, they tend to forget about the daily struggles and problems they faced working every day. In fact, a research conducted by an American scientist shows that 70% of people got rid of stress by spending money. Additionally, most of the people who have mental issues are from budgeting their own money which has led them to depression. Though it may not be the true purpose of its foundation, people can get healthy from spending the money they earned. Such an example clearly shows that spending money is better than saving.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is crucial for people to enjoy the money they earn rather than accumulating money for the future. Opinions may vary from people to people, but what does not change is that this topic is something that needs to be mentioned.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ant. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is beneficial for people to use the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72897196262 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49097418646 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521028037383 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7834517541 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.444444444 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218509942384 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085524419321 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05072535299 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153993566833 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121524000413 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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