Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that adolescents should not take a part-time job when they are young, but there are doubts about whether such a statement bears much truth. However, the opponents still challenge that position, stating that inspire children to take the part-time job is an excellent way to equip them for adult life. While there is much to consider and contrast between both fields of thought, I concur with the latter opinion and have two reasons for doing so. Still, this area deserves further speculation and scrutiny, which I will delve into.
To begin, by taking a part-time job children will learn how to use money wisely, which is an invaluable characteristic in adult life. Moreover, by learning how to use the money they earn from childhood, youngsters will have a better chance to become successful. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. When I was at school my parents advised me to take a few hours day of public work in a local print house, which will give me a steady income. On the one hand, after receiving money I was spending them buying unnecessary things such as video games, icecreams and comics. On the other hand, after a while father offered me not to waste the money but to gather them. Tremendously hard was it for me to achieve but still, I started to waste less money. After six months of collection, it was a considerable amount of money and I was able to buy my first laptop which made be over the moon. Moreover, I gained invaluable experience which showed the advantages of the wise use of money. If the parents had not encouraged me to take a part-time job I would not have gained the priceless lesson about the careful use of money.
Furthermore, by inspiring children to get a part-time job, parents will help them to learn how to communicate with people. Moreover, when children will comprehend this skill it will be easier for them to find a job. For example, when I worked at a print house my task was to sell the newspapers and my salary depended on have many I will sell. Even though I was a shy boy at first and was able to handle only a few in a day, still after a month I learned how to do that effectively. The secret I found was that people will more likely to buy the newspaper if I will talk with them and tell the beginning of a story which is written in the newspaper. In the beginning, it took me blood, sweat, and tears to tell the story but after a few months, I became an excellent storyteller and had a lot of constant buyers. Moreover, by understanding how to communicate with people it helped me to find a lucrative job as a manager in my hometown company. If my parents had not inspired me to take this job it would have been harder for me to find this job.
In light of the reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that the best way for parents to prepare kids for adult life is to help them find a part-time job. This is because this job not only will teach them how to use money wisely but also train their communicative skills which is of vast importance nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hours'' or 'hour's'?
Suggestion: hours'; hour's
...ool my parents advised me to take a few hours day of public work in a local print hou...
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Line 3, column 1044, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he advantages of the wise use of money. If the parents had not encouraged me to ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45950704225 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55635197199 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448943661972 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6506646546 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.541666667 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247487394527 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825137530264 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887182115905 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19377567714 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649241399723 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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