Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people say that museums are no longer of any value to modern citizens, as online technology provides us with all the information we need. I strongly disagree as nothing can compare with seeing a piece of art with our own eyes, not to mention the fact that museums play a vital role in research and restoration.
Museums provide truly multifaceted experience, which can not be copied with the most advanced of modern technology. Even though we can find facts, pictures, videos on the internet, it can not replace seeing an exhibition with our own eyes. Imagine learning about the snow, its qualities, seeing films of a blizzard, and then experiencing snowflakes falling on your skin, no amount of dry facts can compare with the encounter itself.
Moreover, museums are not only buildings holding historical artefacts and pieces of art, but also play a great role in restoring them, as well as conducting research. While some of the funding comes from government and philanthropists, daily visits and ticket sales play an important role in maintaining their upkeep. If museums ceased to exists, we would have to create another institution to take over the responsibility of looking after the exhibitions.
Recent pandemic of Covid-19 proved not only, how valuable museums are, but also how the modern technology can be used to their advantage. In the time, when most of the planet's population lives in lockdown, many museums stepped up, providing virtual tours, marrying this way modern technology with classically recognised values of the galleries.
In conclusion, even though online access to treasures held by museums is now easier than ever, and it might seem there is no need to see them in person, in my opinion, museums will always have their place. They are not only providing 3D, multi-sensual experience but also play a crucial role in preserving their collections as well as funding research.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11464968153 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80963204215 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611464968153 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.3068061871 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154948213704 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584991819603 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389076136492 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853453856216 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392624857601 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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