The argument that The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles by habituating closely to government nutritional recommendations and consuming food products containing kiran, by avoiding sulia is not entirely logically convincing, Since it ignores certain crucial assumptions. Actually, the author failed to consider bolster evidence to the argument. On the other hand, He/ She would bring weak evidence to justify their claim.
Firstly, the author never addresses clearly about the recent survey which closely to government nutritional recommendations, because it represents details of ten years ago. The citizens of Forsythe are following same nutritional diet plan as given by the government ten years ago. the nutritional status are changed drastically in between then years. During at that time may be citizens have minimal diseases, but situation now are different. people are exposed to so much of pollution evenly their health also lessen than ten years ago. So, the argument might be plausible if the author present the details of survey that new government nutritional recommendations are going on.
Secondly, the author explicit about the fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, but He/ She does not represent about what are the foods that contain kiran. If the substance kiran present only in the foods which are frozened, the claim made by the author which the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles is not plausible. Because they are consuming frozen foods again which disturbs health by obesity problems.
Finally, the author failed to consider many ancillary factors because eating more foods which contain kiran is beneficial to the citizens which are more obese, but it does not useful for the normal citizens who are seeking for maintain good health. and also the author never explicit about the reason why sales of sulia has decreased. Even it is healthy food in past, suddenly reduces its sales. may be the citizens are not interested in consuming that food, but, it is useful to health,
In the conclusion, the argument is not completely sound and persuasive, because it rests on series of unsubstantiated assumptions. if argument should be strenghthened if the following assumptions could define.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1938 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.281 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.807 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.82 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.443 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... given by the government ten years ago. the nutritional status are changed drastica...
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Line 2, column 444, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...eases, but situation now are different. people are exposed to so much of pollution eve...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... healthful lifestyles is not plausible. Because they are consuming frozen foods again w...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...o are seeking for maintain good health. and also the author never explicit about th...
^^^
Line 4, column 360, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
... has decreased. Even it is healthy food in past, suddenly reduces its sales. may be the...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 397, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...od in past, suddenly reduces its sales. may be the citizens are not interested in c...
^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... series of unsubstantiated assumptions. if argument should be strenghthened if the...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40871934605 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86815514798 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50136239782 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.305966373 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.764705882 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288964455776 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869810511545 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081367436045 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142701931008 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988279276803 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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