Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of
study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling
reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Success is an extemporaneous event that cannot be determined in advance. Most students are always in dilemma
of choosing the right field for their career. Students sometimes take years in determining the right field for
study. The prompt decribes the role of a teacher, school, colleges and even parents in helping their student
to choose the path where they are likely to succeed. I strongly disagree with the statement to negatively
encourage the field where they are not currently likely to succeed. Pursuing the branch of study not only
depends upon the present status of the student or the outside environment where the student is supposed to
take a important role after his study and two cases are explained.
Firstly, world is dynamic and ever-changing. A career which is very promising at present may have
lower opportunities in future. A student who wants to take a field of study not having many opportunities at
present may have a large scope in future; reproaching him from taking that field might be a reason he might
not succeed. For example, In 1970 nuclear engineering was a promising field with many countries competing
to develop nuclear weapons and plants. By 2000, the nuclear programme of many countries slowed down due to
various disadvantage of nuclear plants and also the formation of new rules to limit nuclear plants. A student,
interested in other fields, took nuclear engineering in around 1995 does blame the institution and people who discouraged
him from taking the field he wanted to pursue. Noone can perciesly determine the area where a particular individual might
succeed.
Secondly, success is not a pivotal factor in life of many people; self-satisfaction will have greater importance
for them. A student who want to pursue arts if takes other field due to the influence might blame the person
or the institution who strongly recommended him to choose other fields. He might not succeed in the field even if the
field is remunerative because he has not given his mind and soul completely in his work. Had he taken arts he might
focus and work harder which is key to success. Even, he didnot succeed in the career he choose he doesnot blame
anyone neither himself but becomes happy for living the life he wanted. Great philosopher have also said that
not greater achievment or popularity matters the most and, what actually makes one life more happy is self esteem
that does not come from path shown or directed by others.
However, may might argue that in the competitive world strong advice focusses the student in the challanges he
have not seen. Is this not what we are talking about? Dissuading a student from the path he likes
also detoriates his interest and capabilty from doing a certain job efficiently. A person so determined and
toiled to perform the task he likes has a greater chance of reaching his suffice out of the blue and achieving great success in
the field not so emphasized by common people.Thus dissuading a student to choose a field where he is not likely to succeed
is completely gauche and caricious activity.
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- The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them not by their contemporaries Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you ta 66
- The following was written as a part of an application for a small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise Currently the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away thus 74
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station Over the past year our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news During this period most of the complaints re 68
- Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain y 83
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd even parents in helping their student to choose the path where they are likely...
^^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...isagree with the statement to negatively encourage the field where they are not c...
^^^
Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Pursuing the branch of study not only depends upon the present status of the s...
^^^
Line 6, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ronment where the student is supposed to take a important role after his study an...
^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...where the student is supposed to take a important role after his study and two ...
^
Line 10, column 61, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...namic and ever-changing. A career which is very promising at present may have lower opportuniti...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch is very promising at present may have lower opportunities in future. A student...
^^^
Line 11, column 21, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... present may have lower opportunities in future. A student who wants to take a field of...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f study not having many opportunities at present may have a large scope in future...
^^^
Line 12, column 32, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ies at present may have a large scope in future; reproaching him from taking that field...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng that field might be a reason he might not succeed. For example, In 1970 nuclea...
^^^
Line 13, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sing field with many countries competing to develop nuclear weapons and plants. B...
^^^
Line 14, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mme of many countries slowed down due to various disadvantage of nuclear plants a...
^^^
Line 16, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e institution and people who discouraged him from taking the field he wanted to p...
^^^
Line 21, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...atisfaction will have greater importance for them. A student who want to pursue...
^^^
Line 22, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...portance for them. A student who want to pursue arts if takes other field due ...
^^
Line 24, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in his work. Had he taken arts he might focus and work harder which is key to su...
^^^
Line 25, column 89, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...ven, he didnot succeed in the career he choose he doesnot blame anyone neither himse...
^^^^^^
Line 25, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the career he choose he doesnot blame anyone neither himself but becomes happy...
^^^
Line 26, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Great philosopher have also said that not greater achievment or popularity mat...
^^^
Line 31, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ocusses the student in the challanges he have not seen. Is this not what we are t...
^^^
Line 32, column 1, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...sses the student in the challanges he have not seen. Is this not what we are talki...
^^^^
Line 33, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... efficiently. A person so determined and toiled to perform the task he likes has ...
^^^
Line 34, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the blue and achieving great success in the field not so emphasized by common pe...
^^^
Line 35, column 46, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ield not so emphasized by common people.Thus dissuading a student to choose a field ...
^^^^
Line 35, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... field where he is not likely to succeed is completely gauche and caricious activ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2621.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03071017274 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69640437563 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47792706334 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9132327671 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.956521739 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.652173913 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.97078651685 583% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182617126433 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055302922397 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388006344378 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506845335853 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386418648436 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd even parents in helping their student to choose the path where they are likely...
^^^
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...isagree with the statement to negatively encourage the field where they are not c...
^^^
Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Pursuing the branch of study not only depends upon the present status of the s...
^^^
Line 6, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ronment where the student is supposed to take a important role after his study an...
^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...where the student is supposed to take a important role after his study and two ...
^
Line 10, column 61, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...namic and ever-changing. A career which is very promising at present may have lower opportuniti...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch is very promising at present may have lower opportunities in future. A student...
^^^
Line 11, column 21, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... present may have lower opportunities in future. A student who wants to take a field of...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f study not having many opportunities at present may have a large scope in future...
^^^
Line 12, column 32, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ies at present may have a large scope in future; reproaching him from taking that field...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng that field might be a reason he might not succeed. For example, In 1970 nuclea...
^^^
Line 13, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sing field with many countries competing to develop nuclear weapons and plants. B...
^^^
Line 14, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mme of many countries slowed down due to various disadvantage of nuclear plants a...
^^^
Line 16, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e institution and people who discouraged him from taking the field he wanted to p...
^^^
Line 21, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...atisfaction will have greater importance for them. A student who want to pursue...
^^^
Line 22, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...portance for them. A student who want to pursue arts if takes other field due ...
^^
Line 24, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in his work. Had he taken arts he might focus and work harder which is key to su...
^^^
Line 25, column 89, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...ven, he didnot succeed in the career he choose he doesnot blame anyone neither himse...
^^^^^^
Line 25, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the career he choose he doesnot blame anyone neither himself but becomes happy...
^^^
Line 26, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Great philosopher have also said that not greater achievment or popularity mat...
^^^
Line 31, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ocusses the student in the challanges he have not seen. Is this not what we are t...
^^^
Line 32, column 1, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...sses the student in the challanges he have not seen. Is this not what we are talki...
^^^^
Line 33, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... efficiently. A person so determined and toiled to perform the task he likes has ...
^^^
Line 34, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the blue and achieving great success in the field not so emphasized by common pe...
^^^
Line 35, column 46, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ield not so emphasized by common people.Thus dissuading a student to choose a field ...
^^^^
Line 35, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... field where he is not likely to succeed is completely gauche and caricious activ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2621.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03071017274 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69640437563 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47792706334 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9132327671 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.956521739 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.652173913 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.97078651685 583% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182617126433 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055302922397 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388006344378 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506845335853 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386418648436 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.