In my country, young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young.
The lifestyle of people has been changing over time and generation by generation. To a great degree, I agree with the idea that the young have a better life in this modern word compared with the ones being in the last few decades. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my persuasive reasons in this respect.
First, the literacy rate has been dramatically increased with the time, which means the educated people make a better life for themselves compared to those who either did not have any literacy or only can write or read something. In the modern world, people and governments also pay a lot of attention to educational issues. As a result, these affairs create a good opportunity for people to provide a suitable and convenient life on average. My father’s experience is a compelling example of this. In the last generation, due to the fact that neither his family nor society did not encourage him to follow his education, he could not complete his high school program. It is better to say that there was no high school around his local surroundings in those days. Therefore, despite having an interest in education, he was forced to work in exchange for minimum wages. Nobody can manage their lives with low incomes. He says that if he had studied so that my father would receive a university degree, he would have made a lot of progress during his lifetime, while everyone can use these opportunities in this convenient society.
Secondly, the hygiene and treatment level has been noticeably going up, which means the people, especially young people, can have a healthy lifestyle than their parents in the past. Tanks t to fantastic improvement in medical science, most of the ones-died diseases are cured; therefore, today, the younger society is no longer worry about these kinds of illnesses. Moreover, it has been estimated that life expectancy has increased with hygiene. In other words. The higher the hygiene level is, the more healthy and convenient the life of every society is.
In conclusion, I believe that today’s young men have better and enjoyable lives than the young in the last generation. This is because the educated ones can make an appropriate life and because the improvement in medicine creates a healthy environment to have a better life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as for, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93264248705 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72169710003 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538860103627 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0148872178 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.210526316 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269809212467 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747191902428 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848712354594 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18462615298 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822007431824 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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