The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
All of us dream to have a luxurious villa, behemoth cars, swimming pools to enjoy as well as brag about our life. While some people chose to relish sybarite living and live comfortably depending on other household helps, drivers and assistants, others chose to use this privilege and work towards their as well as the nation’s development.
To start with, people might get swayed by their parent’s money, assets and lifestyle. After revelling in hedonist lifestyle, they chose to live their life under the aegis of their parents or guardian and the people that help them live luxuriously like the house-helps, drivers, personal assistants, gardeners etc. They just delegate work and relax while their assistants fulfil their duties and task. Be it scheduling for appointments, maintaining the house, cars, or even talking on behalf of them. Such behaviour prohibits the individuals to grow, develop and learn new things as they don’t get the required exposure. For instance, a person who lives off their parent’s success, income and money: he might pull out of school/college and inculcate a habit of squandering money. It is the responsibility of the parents as well as teachers to guide these children and even put restrictions on their hedonist attitude.
On the other hand, the present generation enjoys unprecedented conveniences. Due to rapid development, research as well as industrialization, there is a massive shift towards development of technology, new inventions, solutions to some convoluted problems as well as proliferation of amenities to all parts of the world and to each individual. The hi-tech machines, fast production as well as transportation has enabled us to reach this feat. For instance, children of Ambani have the conveniences and they are working hard to develop as well as support struggling businesses to recuperate.
Moreover, while some hedonists might become dependent, stop learning and growing, others might get galvanized to change the world for better and help those in need. For instance, various film actors, cricketers like Amitabh Bachchan, Shah Rukh Khan and Sehwag have opened new schools, cancer centres, hospitals etc. A responsible citizen must help his/her fellow citizens or those in dire need. It will not only help those in need but will certainly make these people strong and responsible.
In sum, having conveniences is not a privilege, but its utilization is. It is the thinking of the individual that stops him/her from growing strong and independent. Parents have a huge role to look after their children’s behaviour, development, nature and bring them to the right path if they deflect. While some people might feel stagnancy, a person will certainly grow if he/she uses his luxuries in the proper place and direction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ries in the proper place and direction.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, as well as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 444.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30630630631 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98780086033 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574324324324 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5652170243 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.19047619 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0814086158701 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270783187104 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269182112037 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0467105712396 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179667426849 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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