Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the commuinies are facing a lot of problems. Most goverments do not have enough power to help every one in a community. So helping to community by its members is essential. Some people believes that young people give enough time for helping their cumminities, others think otherwise. I totally agree with the latter blief because of two reasons.
First, young people do not have enough time to help. Young people have a lot of works to do. They have to study a lot at university, work part time or permanently for paying their univesity's fee, and hang out with their friends. For example, when I was studying at university, I spent most of my time for doing my thesis. Since my project was about manufacturing a new system, I had to spend much of my time in a laboratory. I usually went lab at six o'clock in the morning, and I came back at 8 o'clock at the night. I also uses my weekend for writing my project results. So, young people do not have time to help
Second, young people do not have money for helping. Most of community's needs usually have a relation with money. Since young people virtually do not have a permanent job, they can help their communities. For example, When I was in high schooI a lot of people came to me for money. They usually needed this money for buying a meal. However, in that time, I received a little pocket money from my parents. Although some times I help them, I usually did not have money, and this always suffered me. In sum, young people usually do not have money for helping.
All and all, young people nowadays do not help their communities because they do not have time and money. However, they can increase their role in helping their communities by better using of their time and saving their money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...have to study a lot at university, work part time or permanently for paying their univesi...
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Line 2, column 451, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...a laboratory. I usually went lab at six oclock in the morning, and I came back at 8 o...
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Line 2, column 457, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ratory. I usually went lab at six oclock in the morning, and I came back at 8 ocl...
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Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...k in the morning, and I came back at 8 oclock at the night. I also uses my weekend fo...
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Line 2, column 524, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...e back at 8 oclock at the night. I also uses my weekend for writing my project resul...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ALL_AND_ALL[1]
Message: This phrase is nonstandard. Did you mean 'all in all' (=after all, nevertheless)?
Suggestion: All in all
...usually do not have money for helping. All and all, young people nowadays do not help thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51097178683 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44675615817 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467084639498 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 455.4 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3703151845 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.4090909091 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04545454545 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321095808845 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121243504044 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104251477572 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247186614015 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646383245447 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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