Do you agree or disagree? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I strongly disagree with that statement, because I think today is more easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to secure, successful future. I hold this opinion because of several reasons. First, nowadays, by developing technology and modernizing societies there are various opportunities to find a good career and job for most of the people, which facilitate finding more secure and successful jobs. Second, people are well-educated and more experienced in comparison with past generations, thus skillful and talented people are able to identify better situations than illiterate people who were living in the past.
According to my point of view, developing technology and progression of industries enable individuals to be more aware and cognizant, therefore, they can identify and choose better chances in order to find a appropriate job and career. In other words, people in the past had not enough opportunities to prepare themselves efficiently by educating and obtaining experimental skills and talents, so they were not vigilant sufficiently to opt best choices. In contrast, most of the people nowadays have different chances to consult with connoisseurs to get informed of what should they do to find a good career, which will secure their future. For instance, there are many consulting associations in my country such as SAM, that help people to recognize their abilities and select their ideal job based on their interests and demands. Since, there was not such a beneficial organizations in the past to ensure people to find a successful job.
Moreover, today, most of the people are well-educated and expert in their specialized major, consequently, their capability of determining and selecting between options are enhanced due to their skills and expertise. Since, most of the people in the past were illiterate and were not able distinguish what kind of job would secure their future, and even what kind of jobs are money-making. To eliminating this problem, people should put themselves into manifold situations and positions to get experiences and skills being able to find a career, which secure their future.
In general, I believe that nowadays in such a modern communities there are more facilities and equipment, which help people to become able to assure their future job in comparison with the past.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...hat statement, because I think today is more easier to identify what type of career or job ...
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Line 2, column 175, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...therefore, they can identify and choose better chances in order to find a appropriate ...
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Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... choose better chances in order to find a appropriate job and career. In other wo...
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Line 2, column 436, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'opt the best'.
Suggestion: opt the best
... they were not vigilant sufficiently to opt best choices. In contrast, most of the peopl...
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Line 2, column 832, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...b based on their interests and demands. Since, there was not such a beneficial organi...
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Line 2, column 871, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'organization'?
Suggestion: organization
... Since, there was not such a beneficial organizations in the past to ensure people to find a ...
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Line 4, column 54, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'community'?
Suggestion: community
... believe that nowadays in such a modern communities there are more facilities and equipment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in contrast, in general, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27807486631 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95795892539 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494652406417 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4692540937 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.846153846 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7692307692 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194366688676 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825474889728 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803860081042 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12750427372 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548094115491 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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