You bought a music concert ticket However you are unable to go So you offer the ticket to your friend explain detailed the concert why you are unable to go how can your friend receive the ticket

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You bought a music concert ticket. However you are unable to go. So you offer the ticket to your friend.
- explain detailed the concert.
- why you are unable to go
- how can your friend receive the ticket.

Dear Moon,
Hello, I’m Darby. I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to offer a music concert ticket to you if you are available because I had an accident yesterday.

Firstly, I’ll let you know what the concert is. A group, BIGBANG will perform in the concert. They are 4 people as you know well. I heard that you really love the group. It is on 25th, January 2015. Therefore, I want you to go there. If you come to my house, I will give you the ticket.

I have really looked forward to going there. However, I had a car accident yesterday. My leg is broken so I can’t see the concert.

If you come to my house on 23th, January 2015, you will be given the ticket or in case that you are not available, I will send you the ticket. Please let me know what you prefer.

All the best,

Darby.

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