In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Nurturing children and encouraging them to achieve their goals can play an important role in their future life, ranging from their personal to social life. However, before encouraging them, parents should be aware of their personality because their reactions and responses to failures strongly depend on their behaviors. Therefore, encouraging them for hard-work can have drawbacks as well as advantages.

First of all, student children are always under the pressure of their peers, and following their friends’ behavioral patterns are common among them because they consider their friends as their role models. Therefore, by encouraging them, we can help them to concentrate on their goals and refuse their playmates’ dangerous propositions such as playing truancy, or even any antisocial behaviors that may stem from lack of having an aim to try to reach for. Therefore, beside trying hard for their future goals their personality is formed based on their past experiments. It means that if they have been successful enough to define their aims and deny their peers, they will be able to have self-rounded personality, causing an assertive person.

Turning to disadvantages, if a person has tried hard but face with the failure at the first space, s/he will always blame herself/himself for her/his incompetence because s/he does not have any familiarity with facing a failure. Therefore, these persons may suffer from psychological disorders in the long-term and they will not be able to accept any risk in their life. Therefore, before encouraging our offspring, we should inform them about probable failures and make them ready for any unpredictable situations.

To conclude, although encouraging children to hard-work can rescue them from different dangers threatening them, considering the consequences of facing with any failure should be taught to them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49826989619 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92556000693 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567474048443 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.1445815577 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.454545455 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107043528785 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526833953547 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320655279097 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746211873879 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199102347457 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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