The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The visuals reveal the information regarding the proportion of Australian by carrying out to sustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical effort according to gender and the various age groups in the year 2010
Overall, the adolescent boys had seen more dynamic and vigorous than girls, whereas the reverse was true for the male from the age group of 25 to over 65.
A deep analysis of the bar chart disclosure, it is unambiguous observed that the figure of man in the 15 to 24 age group who attached to physical activities was 52.8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man had been subordinate physical activites, after decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild drop form 42.2% to 39.5%. Nevertheless, the ratio of woman at the age 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%.
Having a shufty at the graph shown the number of female who performed the excercise, had a downward propensity from the age 45 to over. The 45 to 54 aged woman working out reached a peak 53.3% then it fall from the highest point to 53The visuals reveal the information regarding the proportion of Australian by carrying out to sustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical effort according to gender and the various age groups in the year 2010
Overall, the adolescent boys had seen more dynamic and vigorous than girls, whereas the reverse was true for the male from the age group of 25 to over 65.
A deep analysis of the bar chart disclosure, it is unambiguous observed that the figure of man in the 15 to 24 age group who attached to physical activities was 52.8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man had been subordinate physical activites, after decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild drop form 42.2% to 39.5%. Nevertheless, the ratio of woman at the age 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%.
Having a shufty at the graph shown the data that male was diligent to perform physical pursuit more willingly than the female. After the 45 to 54 aged woman working out reached a peak 53.3% The visuals reveal the information regarding the proportion of Australian by carrying out to sustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical effort according to gender and the various age groups in the year 2010
Overall, the adolescent boys had seen more dynamic and vigorous than girls, whereas the reverse was true for the male from the age group of 25 to over 65.
A deep analysis of the bar chart disclosure, it is unambiguous observed that the figure of man in the 15 to 24 age group who attached to physical activities was 52.8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man had been subordinate physical activites, after decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild drop form 42.2% to 39.5%. Nevertheless, the ratio of woman at the age 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%.
Having a shufty at the graph shown the data that the number of female who performed the excercise, had the downward propensity from the age group 45 to the 65 and over . The 45 to 54 aged woman working out reached a peak 53.3% then fall form the highest point to 53% at the age group 55 to 65 and 47.1% at the aged 65 and over. On the contrary, the figure of man did the physical excercise had a climb in the inclination, after having a accelebration from 39.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the age group 55 to 65 and 46.7% at the aged 65 to over

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical eff...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man ha...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35...
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Line 3, column 380, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...2.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild ...
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Line 3, column 548, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 4...
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Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'witnessed'.
Suggestion: witnessed
...% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%. Havin...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'falls'?
Suggestion: falls
...orking out reached a peak 53.3% then it fall from the highest point to 53The visuals...
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Line 4, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical eff...
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Line 6, column 205, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man ha...
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Line 6, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35...
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Line 6, column 380, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...2.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild ...
^^
Line 6, column 548, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 4...
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Line 6, column 625, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'witnessed'.
Suggestion: witnessed
...% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%. Having...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical eff...
^^
Line 9, column 205, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man ha...
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Line 9, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35...
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Line 9, column 380, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...2.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild ...
^^
Line 9, column 548, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 4...
^^^
Line 9, column 625, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'witnessed'.
Suggestion: witnessed
...% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%. Having...
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Line 10, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...from the age group 45 to the 65 and over . The 45 to 54 aged woman working out rea...
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Line 10, column 435, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... climb in the inclination, after having a accelebration from 39.5% to 43.5% at th...
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Line 10, column 491, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...from 39.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the ag...
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Line 10, column 497, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'jumps'?
Suggestion: jumps
...9.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the age group ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
nevertheless, regarding, then, whereas, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 7.0 314% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 6.8 368% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 145.0 33.7804878049 429% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3421.0 965.302439024 354% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 787.0 196.424390244 401% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34688691233 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.29655739875 3.73543355544 142% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56722564685 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 106.607317073 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.200762388818 0.547539520022 37% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 992.7 283.868780488 350% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 19.0 4.33902439024 438% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 46.0 22.4926829268 205% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.113435705 43.030603864 240% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 201.235294118 112.824112599 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.2941176471 22.9334400587 202% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.23529411765 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 3.83414634146 261% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 1.69756097561 1355% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239890240608 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120502991741 0.103423049105 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05655655131 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140434027573 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585021767523 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.2 13.2329268293 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.17 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.84 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 40.7170731707 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.4329268293 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.9970731707 186% => OK
text_standard: 29.0 11.0658536585 262% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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