The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in the government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition
As soon as we are born, we start to recognize our environment and eventually think of controlling each variable, but that same environment hinders and at the same time pushes us to do more is defined competition. Surely, cooperation is needed up to some extent to coexist in society but competition is something that has been fueling innovation and pushing the human generation forward towards a sustainable and efficient future.
The two big tech giants Apple and Microsoft since their establishment are competing in a developing market to manufacture better products than each other. This healthy competition afforded both Steve Jobs and Bill Gates to become apogees while at the same time contributing to the society by producing state of the art products such the the iphone, microsoft office, microsoft windows. These products today have become an integeral part of our lives , whenever we need to edit documents, most commonly the name of the tool which pops in our head is ' microsoft windows' . Both the CEOs pushed the limit to what can be done with technology fueling each others hungers. Hence, a sense of competition is far more essential than cooperation, people evolve more in an unconducive environment.
Kim Jong Un, the supreme leader of North Korea is unchallenged and receives all the cooperation from the people of his country, the end result of so much cooperation is a lack of improvement. Fear of losing in any competition instills the thought of improving ourselves which helps in evolution. North Korea is, therefore, is a retreating economy and lags behind in resources other than firepower to most countries. Hence, the competition also allows us to look at improving something holistically rather than something that is prim to our interest. Therefore, the best way to prepare young people for leadership roles at the very least is to encourage healthy competition. Here healthy competition implies improving each other in a friendly manner without taking inimical actions.
Research has flourished in the recent years due to the fact that each researcher is competing with each other to get tenure which fuels healthy competition. Hence even though they have to work together cooperatively they have to compete for achieving rewards.
Hence a mix of cooperation and competition is required with more focus on competition to develop the young people so that they can contribute to a
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...ontributing to the society by producing state of the art products such the the iphone, microsoft...
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...roducing state of the art products such the the iphone, microsoft office, microsoft win...
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...roducing state of the art products such the the iphone, microsoft office, microsoft win...
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...me of the tool which pops in our head is microsoft windows . Both the CEOs pushed...
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...h pops in our head is microsoft windows . Both the CEOs pushed the limit to what ...
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...tills the thought of improving ourselves which helps in evolution. North Korea is...
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...tenure which fuels healthy competition. Hence even though they have to work together ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, look, so, still, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18414322251 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94332201235 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567774936061 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0551517678 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.6875 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1875 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218638334688 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690472271117 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688422612777 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113404656793 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670928269666 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.