Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of a doubt, the ever-increasing development of technology has affected many aspects of people’s lives. One of these effects is that it has increased the exposure of people to celebrities’ news. Should media realize the significance of showing the celebrities’ news on famous people’s own lives and society, they will ponder over reducing the growth of their news carefully. This issue has recently been the topic of debate among experts. Despite the arguments asserting that it is good to give celebrities no privacy, I believe otherwise for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First and foremost, it is my firm conviction that the lack of privacy causes serious mental diseases for celebrities. To be more specific, it has negative effects on famous people and puts serious pressure on them. Celebrities have bad days and good days like any human being and sometimes they need to have privacy and focus on their personal life without being worried about paparazzi and what people might think about them. However, nowadays, they have no privacy in their life and feel that they are followed everywhere they go. The most important thing in one’s life, which is his or her freedom, has been taken from them. This puts a large amount of pressure on them which in turn leads to mental problems. To put it into a more vivid picture, there was a famous singer in our city that had a lot of followers and fans. He had some problems with his wife and they got divorced in the end. After their divorce, all of the news talked about their lives and the reasons behind their divorce. Hearing this news and seeing paparazzi in front of his door all the time, made him depressed, and caused a high level of anxiety and stress. In the end, he could not tolerate it and committed suicide. Therefore, I believe the lack of privacy has created a lot of mental problems for famous people.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that following the news of celebrities’ personal lives has negative effects on society, especially, on young people. It does not require great intelligence to ascertain the fact that juveniles follow famous people’s news and know everything about them. They live vicariously through celebrities’ lives and compare them with their own lives. Seeing those luxurious trips, clothes, and unconditional pleasures make the youth believe that there is something missing in their lives. It puts this belief into their minds that physical appearance or financial situation show one’s worth and value. Under such a circumstance, the youth try so hard to prove themselves that they have nothing less. They will start to imitate famous people’s behaviors, and as all of us know, celebrities sometimes promote negative behaviors like smoking weed or addiction. Shoot a short glance at society and it will surely provide you with crystal clear examples of juveniles who have started smoking cigarettes or drinking alcohol after seeing their role model has done this, or have borrowed brand clothes to take pictures and upload them on their pages to show that they have, for instance, Hermes belt like their favorite celebrity. As a result, in my point of view, following the news of celebrities have destructive effects on the youth and society as a whole.
To summarize, given the arguments mentioned above, it seems fair to conclude that celebrities need to have more privacy. I believe this way because not only does this cause mental diseases for famous people, but has disruptive effects on young people and society. Needless to say, my idea brings up a lot of challenges and questions, which go beyond the scope of this essay.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
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Message: The proper name in singular (Hermes) must be used with a third-person verb: 'belts'.
Suggestion: belts
...ow that they have, for instance, Hermes belt like their favorite celebrity. As a res...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3113.0 1977.66487455 157% => OK
No of words: 628.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95700636943 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62712554175 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 312.0 212.727598566 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496815286624 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 962.1 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5803011632 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.344827586 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6551724138 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51724137931 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171085541045 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454475752841 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477013954455 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100148691063 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558871423455 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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