The diagram illustrates how West Park Secondary School has transformed over a period of 60 years since its establishment in 1950.
Overall, it can be seen that the school had undergone some significant changes throughout the period with the expansion of the school building, as well as the addition of a sports field and car park.
As the diagram shows, in 1950, the school had one building just right next to some houses. There was also a playground immediately behind the school and farmland located in the south-west of it. After 30 years, the houses were demolished to build a car park. Moreover, the building was expanded into two parts, one was the science block and the other was used as the main building. Another noteworthy change that happened was the conversion of the farmland to a sports field.
Looking at the school in 2010, the only marked change that occurred was the extension of the car park that occupied almost half of the total area of the school. As a result, the size of the sports field and the playground had to be shrunken to make way for the enlargement of the car park.
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- The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... building, as well as the addition of a sports field and car park. As the diagram s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, second, so, well, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55595629022 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2267439186 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194504976931 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828390814842 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602281305714 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132076043079 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546520215399 0.0819641961636 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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