Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction Do you agree or disagree Provide relevant examples if necessary

Some people believe that earning more salary is crucial than having a satisfactory work. It is true that more revenue formulates better life standards; however, there is a serious disagreement on this issue, because spending more time with relatives and having a friendly work environment gives more reason to satisfy his job rather than getting big salary with full of stressed work.

Firstly, most people would like to spend more time with their family or friends. Unfortunately, jobs with big salary usually have very heavy work conditions, especially limited time sheets. It takes long hours to finish detailed tasks ordered by though manager. As a conclusion, reaching to the targets becomes more important than spending time with the family or friends. Managers usually demand range of tasks and press their employees to get immediate feedbacks. Due to overloaded work conditions, most of the employees leave their job in a few years. For example, according to the research carried out by Oxford University, 80% of employees give up working such kind of works after maximum 2 years.

Moreover, in order to taking account of the human factor, friendly work environment is very important for most people. It decreases the level of stress and gives employees to overcome challenges easily in comparison with a depressed environment. Because scientists prove that an employee with less stressful conditions would be more beneficial that the ones who is under full of stress. For instance, based the surveys carried out by New York Times, in UK, 40% companies increased their profits after making amendments on work conditions, such as more flexible, less depressed and with organizing some team buildings.

In conclusion, notwithstanding big salary rises a person's life standards up, it is better to spend more time with your relatives and working less stressful work conditions in order to satisfy his job. Money could not be a primary asset in a person's life.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rning more salary is crucial than having a satisfactory work. It is true that mor...
^^
Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ion, notwithstanding big salary rises a persons life standards up, it is better to spen...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...Money could not be a primary asset in a persons life.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22397476341 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75155185777 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555205047319 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4331143804 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136608343107 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523416783355 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533187593867 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10031910205 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486863396258 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rning more salary is crucial than having a satisfactory work. It is true that mor...
^^
Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ion, notwithstanding big salary rises a persons life standards up, it is better to spen...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...Money could not be a primary asset in a persons life.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22397476341 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75155185777 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555205047319 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4331143804 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136608343107 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523416783355 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533187593867 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10031910205 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486863396258 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.