Throughout history, people have dreamed perfect society, but they have not agreed what an ideal society is.
What do you think the most important elements to have perfect society in modern world? How people can achieve an ideal society?
Each person holds a different view on how an ideal society should be. In my opinion, an ideal society is the society where everyone who lives in it behaves with pure altruism. To achieve such thing, we have to pay more attention to the education that young children receive both at home and at school.
We are facing many crises, be it severe environmental degradation or widespread poverty, and unfortunately most of them arise due to our selfishness. When we truly care about the livelihood of our future generation, there will be less damage done to the environment to justify economic progress. Or when we are aware of the suffering of those who are living in poor, unsanitary conditions on our doorstep and genuinely want to offer help, there will be more charity and less poverty. We can deal with our own problems and build an ideal society if our actions are driven by pure altruism.
It is, in fact, extremely difficult, if not impossible, to create a society where everyone behaves with true selflessness. However, we can make a paradigm change to our today’s society through innovating children’s early education. A sense of altruism emerges during childhood and can be developed through years of schooling. Parents can nurture altruism in their children at an early age by educating them about sharing and giving. This may greatly affect the trajectory of a child’s personality development which can later be reinforced by education at school. As a result, that child is likely to become an altruistic individual when he reaches adulthood.
In conclusion, I believe the most important element of an ideal society is altruism and we have to focus on nurturing our children’s altruistic behavior from an early age if we wish to build such society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00337837838 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87605976593 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574324324324 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7140714279 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.785714286 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233278622092 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894310993175 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866335804994 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178613292201 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911542137222 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.