The rules have important effect on managing our societies, whether these rules that young people have to obey are too strict , this can be weighed in manu deffirent aspect, in my perseptive, I do not concur with the statement that says, the rules that societies expect young people to obey are stringest. in the following essay I will elaborated on a couple of reason to explain my concept.
First, and foremost, the young people like teenagers do not have enough experience and knowlegev to do perfect decision in their live, furthermore, they do not attaind to the college in this age, therefore they lake to skills. for instance, when I was in the middle school , my friend Jun decided to give up his education and work in resturant, moreover, he get a bad habit from unsuitable type of work like smoking, if the government put a strick rule to prevent student from givning up their school, in this way,my friend never leftb his education, from this example we can figure out the importance of rules in the futur live of the teenager.
Second, these rules put by expert persons, they did a lot of experments to be sure about the accurety of these rules, in addition to their effect on people live. especialy the young people, furthermore, the basic rules that the parent put to arrange their kids live, because, in this age the children always depend on their mom and dad to help them to plane their future and in perfect manar, from my real live, my parent put to me and my brother a specific rules, like how to manage our time between studying and doing our hobby for relaxation, they explain to us the importance of education for getting an excellent career in the future, they learn as never neglected our homework, and return back home early, as a result I am a dentist now and my brother is lawyer. therefore obeying a strict rule from government or our parent is crucial thing to determine our behavior and draw the futur.
To sum up, the statment for obeying stict rules is not as peruasive as it stand, based on exposition mentioned above.
The rules have important effect on managing our societies, whether these rules that young people have to obey are too strict , this can be weighed in manu deffirent aspect, in my perseptive, I do not concur with the statement that says, the rules that societies expect young people to obey are stringest. in the following essay I will elaborated on a couple of reason to explain my concept.
First, and foremost, the young people like teenagers do not have enough experience and knowlegev to do perfect decision in their live, furthermore, they do not attaind to the college in this age, therefore they lake to skills. for instance, when I was in the middle school , my friend Jun decided to give up his education and work in resturant, moreover, he get a bad habit from unsuitable type of work like smoking, if the government put a strick rule to prevent student from givning up their school, in this way,my friend never leftb his education, from this example we can figure out the importance of rules in the futur live of the teenager.
Second, these rules put by expert persons, they did a lot of experments to be sure about the accurety of these rules, in addition to their effect on people live. especialy the young people, furthermore, the basic rules that the parent put to arrange their kids live, because, in this age the children always depend on their mom and dad to help them to plane their future and in perfect manar, from my real live, my parent put to me and my brother a specific rules, like how to manage our time between studying and doing our hobby for relaxation, they explain to us the importance of education for getting an excellent career in the future, they learn as never neglected our homework, and return back home early, as a result I am a dentist now and my brother is lawyer. therefore obeying a strict rule from government or our parent is crucial thing to determine our behavior and draw the futur.
To sum up, the statment for obeying stict rules is not as peruasive as it stand, based on exposition mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62465753425 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49206657228 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539726027397 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.1344086022 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 168.900673474 48.9658058833 345% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 211.0 100.406767564 210% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.625 20.6045352989 221% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.25 5.45110844103 243% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448191718437 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203515416982 0.076458572812 266% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.238974854359 0.0737576698707 324% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299998112643 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.253233967526 0.0645574589148 392% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.1 11.7677419355 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.0537634409 199% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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