Nowadays, music plays a pivotal role in life besides our works and study. However, many people say that in some countries, there is a minority number of children participating in music concerts or music classes. In my point of view, this can be attributed to a few reasons and I believe that young people should learn more about music or instruments.
To begin, there are a host of reasons with regard to the boring feel about the music of adolescents. First, with the evolution of technology, young people gravitate toward playing video games or watching movies instead of playing musical instruments. Being able to play any musical tool requires a couple of hundred hours of practice and children who are not passionate about it will not learn it patiently. On top of that, classical music does not sound attractive to children. Adolescents today usually lean toward pop or rap because of their exciting atmosphere and catchy melodies.
On the other hand, playing musical instruments benefits them from mental strengths to personalities. After a very hard-working day, playing guitar or piano is a useful way to blow off some steams and escape from game addiction. During the camping, if there is a person who can play the guitar, the camping day will become more interesting and that person will receive admires from others around. This enables greater self-confidence and well-rounded development. Furthermore, taking part in classical music concerts will make our children become more mature because of the understanding of musical achievement from their ancestors.
In conclusion, although children do not prefer playing musical instruments and listen to classical music recently, by the innovation of teaching methods, they will be big on classical music and instruments because of their advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, with regard to, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28373702422 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90033107685 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57785467128 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.762639305 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.071428571 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286103828276 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976132756829 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814251675796 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18759602801 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868698407279 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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