Money is a double edged sword. Either you can use it in aright way or in an wrong way. Personally, I believe that children should be given money from their parents for each mark they earned in the exam. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, when the children take money, they will encourage them to do another things. They will also make them studying more to gain more money. Therefore, they will do many things that help them to take money easily and they can buy what they love. My own experience is a good illustration of this. When I was at high school, my parents told me that If I got high marks on the exams they will give me money to buy anything I want. This was really a great encouragement for me to study more and more because I wanted to buy a new phone and also to register for my driver's license. So I passed the test and got high mark and I bought what I love. In addition, I entered the faculty of pharmacy and my parents were so proud of me. Therefore, by taking money as an encouragement makes me and my parents happy.
Furthermore, you can learn how to manage your money. If you used to take money from your family, you would learn how to save it and when to spend it in a right situation.Consequently, you will be a good financial analyst in the future. My own experience is a convincing evidence of this. I used to take money from my parents when I was nine years old. In addition to, they taught me how to spend this money. Therefore, this have kept me updated how to save and manage my money which had an effect on me in the future. So by saving money, I opened my private business that has helped me a lot in my living. This experience taught me that I can give my child money to encourage him to manage his money.
In conclusion, I believe that offering money for children when they get high marks is a good idea. This because you will be encouraged to do more and more and you will learn how to manage your money. So, everyone should use money in a useful way.
- TPO12Do you agree or disagree with following statement It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects to specialize in one specific subject 60
- 13 Which area the government should fund to improve children s education 1 hiring more teachers to teach in a small class 2 preschool education before kinder garten 3 providing some training courses so that teachers can be more professional 73
- 13 Which area the government should fund to improve children s education 1 hiring more teachers to teach in a small class 2 preschool education before kinder garten 3 providing some training courses so that teachers can be more professional 82
- TPO 10 Integrated Writing Task 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... Either you can use it in aright way or in an wrong way. Personally, I believe that children sh...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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... parents were so proud of me. Therefore, by taking money as an encouragement make...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a useful way" with adverb for "useful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ur money. So, everyone should use money in a useful way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, another thing, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21212121212 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46946457356 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421717171717 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0261559013 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.5 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280234594712 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916637632077 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900169981675 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203136941533 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662039448936 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.54 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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