Nowadays, it is true that some celebrities are known for their glamorous lifestyles rather than for their contribution to society. Some argue that this phenomenon has an adverse effect on the youth. I totally disagree with that view.
On the one hand, famous people somehow have influences on the community, especially their followers. At puberty age, the personality and behavior of teenagers could be affected by many factors, including their idols whom they consider as role models. Take obsessive fans as an example. When they looking at the exotic and lavish lifestyle of their idols, they try to imitate and possess similar objects, despite the financial issues. This exerts materialistic lifestyles, which has potential negative impacts on impressionable adolescents, both mentally and physically.
However, the root cause of this problem is not the flashy lifestyle of celebrities. Evidently, the family and nurture environment rather than celebrities’ glamorous lifestyle, have more impact on shaping the behavior of young people. It is important for everyone to learn to live within their means and to have a moral code of conduct. Furthermore, there are at least as many celebrities whose accomplishments make them excellent role models for young people. They demonstrate great effort, determination, and ambition, which is required for someone who wants to be truly successful in their chosen field.
In conclusion, while it could not be ignored the influence of superstars, it is wrong to blame them for the wrongdoings of their young followers. Each individual should have their own moral principles to guide them through life and nobody is supposed to blindly imitate others.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
... to be truly successful in their chosen field. In conclusion, while it could not b...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 606, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...truly successful in their chosen field. In conclusion, while it could not be ign...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, at least, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42424242424 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97300951615 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628787878788 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.094188258 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284521252234 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855968672875 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671905749983 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174744147134 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593214975005 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
... to be truly successful in their chosen field. In conclusion, while it could not b...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 606, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...truly successful in their chosen field. In conclusion, while it could not be ign...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, at least, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42424242424 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97300951615 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628787878788 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.094188258 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284521252234 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855968672875 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671905749983 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174744147134 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593214975005 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.