People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Undoubtedly, our modern life is much more complicated than the past, and people need to develop their skills to make a better life for themselves. While many people believe that developing a lot of different skills can help people to be successful, others agree with the obverse idea. Neverthless, from my point of view, if people want to be prosperous and successfull, they should develop as many as skills they can. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, having a lot of skills can help people to find a job easely, which is a key factor in modern life. There is no doubt that a person who has plenty of different skills can search for wide range of appropreate jobs. The more abilities and skills people have, the more chance they have to get a better job. Although focusing on one specific skill can be simple and comfortable for some people, this has plenty of disadvantages. For example, my brother has been working in the big company with high amount of salary because he speakes three different languages as well as special designing skills. This is obvious that my brother can find a job whenever and wherever he wants. Therefore, people who improve and develop different skills can exhibit their talent and interest to employers that helps them to get a job.
Forthuremore, our capacity is massive and we are able to focus more than one tasks, which can cause success in our life. Focusing in one skills can also be harmful for people's future. If we spend our whole time to develop one skill, we will lose the chance of finding and knowing our different talents, which negatively affects our life. Neither working hard on one skill nor getting deeper knowledge in one area help us to be successful, insted developing different abilities will improve our self confidence. Self confidence is a critical factor for people who try to get higher level of satisfaction in the life. For example, we all know some celebrities that are able to do a lot of tasks very well. Jet Li is a world known actor who won ten martial art competition award before starting his career as an actor. He was a hero because he not only enhanced his martial art skills but also he tried hard to learn how to be a moive star, and with this approch he became the famous super star of all time. Concequently, people who try to develop a lot of different skills, can be very successful in their future life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should not focus on one skill. this is because people with a lot of abilities can find better job without searching for long time, and also having a lot of professional skills can help us to be more successful in our life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one skill', 'a skill', or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: one skill; a skill; skills
... cause success in our life. Focusing in one skills can also be harmful for peoples future....
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p us to be successful, insted developing different abilities will improve our sel...
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Line 3, column 772, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'award' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'awards'.
Suggestion: awards
...tor who won ten martial art competition award before starting his career as an actor....
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Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...t people should not focus on one skill. this is because people with a lot of abiliti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59793814433 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53702438296 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468041237113 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1255844415 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.363636364 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434644144869 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147918369703 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095237779161 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301358217819 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298185177254 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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