Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Mr. Gardener,

Hope you are doing well.

Please be advised that I am working on the Project which we discussed in our last meeting. I have searched a lot and got much information in detailed.
However, I have some software problems and I cannot manage it due to the lack of professional knowledge on computer systems, so that I applied for IT support service of our Company.
Unfortunately, they reacted too slow and it affected my working schedule adversely. Because they have too mix application procedure and it took me one day to fill all the requests correctly.

Therefore, I would like to ask you to talk to Mrs. Parkin, Head of IT Department, to accelerate the fixing proses, if possible. Because IT staff is not going to execute my request up to at least 5 business days. So it will be impossible to finish the work by the deadline.

I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely,
Ruslan Mirzazada

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to mix'?
Suggestion: to mix
...g schedule adversely. Because they have too mix application procedure and it took me on...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mixed', 'mixt'.
Suggestion: mixed; mixt
...hedule adversely. Because they have too mix application procedure and it took me on...
^^^
Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...elerate the fixing proses, if possible. Because IT staff is not going to execute my req...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'staffs'?
Suggestion: staffs
... fixing proses, if possible. Because IT staff is not going to execute my request up t...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, therefore, well, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 791.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76506024096 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83007534572 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.710843373494 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1202063871 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.9166666667 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8333333333 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170534719856 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495790117717 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351834406122 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637565213155 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02597700675 0.0580467560999 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to mix'?
Suggestion: to mix
...g schedule adversely. Because they have too mix application procedure and it took me on...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mixed', 'mixt'.
Suggestion: mixed; mixt
...hedule adversely. Because they have too mix application procedure and it took me on...
^^^
Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...elerate the fixing proses, if possible. Because IT staff is not going to execute my req...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'staffs'?
Suggestion: staffs
... fixing proses, if possible. Because IT staff is not going to execute my request up t...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, therefore, well, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 791.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76506024096 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83007534572 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.710843373494 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1202063871 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.9166666667 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8333333333 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170534719856 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495790117717 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351834406122 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637565213155 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02597700675 0.0580467560999 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.