In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if the try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?
Some customs in the world claim that it is true if children work hard to gain something, they can achieve whatever they want. However, this issue would bring advantages and disadvantages to the children.
On the one hand, the doctrine to always try hard enough to gain something would encourage children to achieve their dream. The children urge to keep try and try until the efforts give good result. This kind of spirit prevent the children to have hopeless feeling as they believe they are able to complete the mission. My younger sibling, for instance, since he got this concept of thinking at earlier ages, he keeps study everyday to get better result to achieve his dream. He seldom to get into depression as he always think in positively way. Thus, children would rise up from the fall to keep trying harder.
On the other hand, this issue also carry drawback to the children. Since they are still children, they probably become more stressful to practice this attitude. The doctrine recommends children to keep working and give all of their energy to focus on something. In fact, it is commonly known that in their developing age the needs to balance play time, socialize time, and rest time are essential things for children development. If they do not have chance to do this activities, they tend to become less happier and impact to their psychological side. Hence, to prevent the children get stress, they shall not to focus only to keep working hard at all of their efforts.
In conclusion, there are benefit and downside of this matter. Although to keep working hard may give encouragement to the children, however it can causes stress to their psychological side. It would be wisely if people balance the practical of this attitude to the children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 141, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keeping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: keeping
... achieve their dream. The children urge to keep try and try until the efforts give good...
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Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... their dream. The children urge to keep try and try until the efforts give good result....
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Line 2, column 422, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...hinking at earlier ages, he keeps study everyday to get better result to achieve his dre...
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Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...dom to get into depression as he always think in positively way. Thus, children would...
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Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rine recommends children to keep working and give all of their energy to focus on...
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Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...pment. If they do not have chance to do this activities, they tend to become less ha...
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Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less happy'?
Suggestion: less happy
...do this activities, they tend to become less happier and impact to their psychological side....
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Line 4, column 38, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'downsides'?
Suggestion: downsides
.... In conclusion, there are benefit and downside of this matter. Although to keep workin...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...agement to the children, however it can causes stress to their psychological side. It ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, still, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85099337748 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51379466806 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526490066225 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4098919909 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1764705882 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380690101636 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133670376888 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722229558194 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261248816896 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662694519926 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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