the chart below show the expenditure of 2 countries on comsumer goods in 2010

Essay topics:

the chart below show the expenditure of 2 countries on comsumer goods in 2010

The bar chart illustrates the consumption of goods of UK and France in 5 fields of things like cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras.
Overall, spending in cars had the highest consumption in both 2 nations and the opposite was true for perfume which was the lowest payment in 2 countries. In UK, the consumption of cars, books and cameras were more than in France. While the payments for computers and perfume were lower than France.
People in the UK spent about 450,000$ on cars to the 400,000$ in France. Additionally, in UK people spent more money on books around 400,000$ in 2021 while the figure for France was only 350,000$. The consumption of cameras in UK about 350,00$ was doubled that of France was only 150,000$.
On the other hand, people in France spent more money on buying computers was about 370,000$ compared to nearly 350,000$ in UK. Moreover, above 200,000$ was spent by people in France to buy perfume while the figure for the consumption in UK was approximately 140,000$.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86549707602 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62843216666 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0773626477 43.030603864 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4444444444 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0182897121979 0.215688989381 8% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0113488971429 0.103423049105 11% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032099528515 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0255350185716 0.15604864568 16% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442279495383 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.06136585366 83% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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