There is no doubt that completing a high school provides the student a sigh of relief from all the academic stress they have gone through over the years. Although some people claim that students should pursue the university life right away, however, i have a different perspective. I think student should take off one year so they could work. The reasons for my perspective will be discuss in the following paragraphs.
First of all, working after completion of the high school would assist the students with practical experience. By working student would have an opportunity to learn about the practical field of their study, which in turn aid the students what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they would enter the university life, they would have a clarity what they profession they are going to choose.
My opinion on this matter has been profoundly explain by my own personal experience. As I had a dream to become pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I decided to work in a retail pharmacy as a sales person. While working in the retail pharmacy ,i came to know that i did not like the nature of pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked in the Pharmaceutical Industry. After working in industry i realized I was more into the medicinal chemistry stuff. Therefore, upon my enrolling in the university , I decided to choose the major in medicinal chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutical Industry. If I had not joined the worked after my school, I would not have come to know about the profession i like.
Secondly, doing job after the completion of school helps us the students to realize that student life was a blessing. Certainly, practical life is tough so students would come to appreciate their students life more. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I started working after the completion of the school, I would miss all my school friends and all those fond memories and fun life of school. As I was working in the pharmacy, I had to follow the roles and regulation and I had to go to work on time which was not easier for me. So, I would appreciate my school life more. Therefore, when i enrolled in the university I started enjoying every moment in my university.
This example demonstrates my opinion that working after the school reminds the students with all fond memories they have experienced during school life.
In conclusion, from the above-mentioned discussion, I would suggest the students that they should get the taste of practical life after they finish high school. This would not only help them to decide their career and this would also help them to appreciate student life more.
There is no doubt that completing a high school provides the student a sigh of relief from all the academic stress they have gone through over the years. Although some people claim that students should pursue the university life right away, however, i have a different perspective. I think student should take off one year so they could work. The reasons for my perspective will be discuss in the following paragraphs.
First of all, working after completion of the high school would assist the students with practical experience. By working student would have an opportunity to learn about the practical field of their study, which in turn aid the students what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they would enter the university life, they would have a clarity what they profession they are going to choose.
My opinion on this matter has been profoundly explain by my own personal experience. As I had a dream to become pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I decided to work in a retail pharmacy as a sales person. While working in the retail pharmacy ,i came to know that i did not like the nature of pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked in the Pharmaceutical Industry. After working in industry i realized I was more into the medicinal chemistry stuff. Therefore, upon my enrolling in the university , I decided to choose the major in medicinal chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutical Industry. If I had not joined the worked after my school, I would not have come to know about the profession i like.
Secondly, doing job after the completion of school helps us the students to realize that student life was a blessing. Certainly, practical life is tough so students would come to appreciate their students life more. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I started working after the completion of the school, I would miss all my school friends and all those fond memories and fun life of school. As I was working in the pharmacy, I had to follow the roles and regulation and I had to go to work on time which was not easier for me. So, I would appreciate my school life more. Therefore, when i enrolled in the university I started enjoying every moment in my university.
This example demonstrates my opinion that working after the school reminds the students with all fond memories they have experienced during school life.
In conclusion, from the above-mentioned discussion, I would suggest the students that they should get the taste of practical life after they finish high school. This would not only help them to decide their career and this would also help them to appreciate student life more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...pective. I think student should take off one year so they could work. The reason...
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...hich in turn aid the students what major they need to choose during university ...
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...students what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they...
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... what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they would e...
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...nion on this matter has been profoundly explain by my own personal experience. As I had...
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...e. As I had a dream to become pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I de...
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...e pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I decided to work in a retail ph...
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Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
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... not like the nature of pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked i...
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Line 4, column 344, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...f pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked in the Pharmaceutic...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... worked in the Pharmaceutical Industry. After working in industry i realized I was mo...
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Line 4, column 428, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...cal Industry. After working in industry i realized I was more into the medicinal ...
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Line 4, column 532, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...ore, upon my enrolling in the university , I decided to choose the major in medici...
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Line 4, column 596, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...he major in medicinal chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutica...
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Line 4, column 615, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
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...al chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutical Industry. If I had n...
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Line 4, column 749, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... have come to know about the profession i like. Secondly, doing job after...
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Line 8, column 610, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...te my school life more. Therefore, when i enrolled in the university I started en...
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Line 8, column 657, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...led in the university I started enjoying every moment in my university. This e...
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...njoying every moment in my university. This example demonstrates my opinion tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83511777302 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69605965672 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441113490364 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3266192191 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0833333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370852846939 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120585415128 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150897504663 0.0737576698707 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251139081122 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.207412978458 0.0645574589148 321% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...pective. I think student should take off one year so they could work. The reason...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich in turn aid the students what major they need to choose during university ...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...students what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... what major they need to choose during university life. Thus, when they would e...
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Line 4, column 47, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'explained'.
Suggestion: explained
...nion on this matter has been profoundly explain by my own personal experience. As I had...
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Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e. As I had a dream to become pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I de...
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Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e pharmacist ,so after finishing my high school, I decided to work in a retail ph...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...on. While working in the retail pharmacy ,i came to know that i did not like the n...
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Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... While working in the retail pharmacy ,i came to know that i did not like the na...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...he retail pharmacy ,i came to know that i did not like the nature of pharmacist j...
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Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , after” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... not like the nature of pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 344, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...f pharmacist job. So, after working six month there I also worked in the Pharmaceutic...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... worked in the Pharmaceutical Industry. After working in industry i realized I was mo...
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Line 4, column 428, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...cal Industry. After working in industry i realized I was more into the medicinal ...
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Line 4, column 532, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...ore, upon my enrolling in the university , I decided to choose the major in medici...
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Line 4, column 596, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...he major in medicinal chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutica...
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Line 4, column 615, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...al chemistry, because I already worked in in the Pharmaceutical Industry. If I had n...
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Line 4, column 749, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... have come to know about the profession i like. Secondly, doing job after...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...te my school life more. Therefore, when i enrolled in the university I started en...
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Line 8, column 657, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...led in the university I started enjoying every moment in my university. This e...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...njoying every moment in my university. This example demonstrates my opinion tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83511777302 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69605965672 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441113490364 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3266192191 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0833333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370852846939 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120585415128 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150897504663 0.0737576698707 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251139081122 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.207412978458 0.0645574589148 321% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.