Nowadays, there has been an alarming trend of allocating tax money for the promotion of a healthier lifestyle instead of treatments for sick people. Personally, I disagree with this viewpoint because countless people are hospitalized due to their genetic defects and a large section of society can not afford to adopt a healthier lifestyle.
On the one hand, if more people lead healthier lifestyles, fewer people will be sick in the first place due to lifestyle-related factors. For example, plenty of teenagers insouciantly eat fast food and consume sugary drinks on a regular basis because of their tastiness, even though these dietary choices are associated with higher risks of obesity and diabetes. If these people are made aware of the consequences involved, they may switch to more salubrious options. Therefore, it is indeed important to educate people about what constitutes a healthy lifestyle to boost their well-being.
On the other hand, there is a certain group of people who do not have the ability to bear treatment expenses, especially the cost of drugs, which are increasingly high these days. Hence, patients are not likely to pay by themselves and need governmental support instead. For instance, a large number of residents in the United States are about to be in debt for the medical care that they received after contracting COVID-19. In addition to that, the government's main mission is to take care of taxpayers and provide social services including healthcare instead of spending it on profitable purposes.
In conclusion, in spite of relatively minor benefits, promoting a healthier way of life among the general public is not of paramount importance more than treating sick people properly. Governments should take resolute actions to regulate this situation and mtigate implicit risks for the community.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...rnmental support instead. For instance, a large number of residents in the United States are abou...
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...oting a healthier way of life among the general public is not of paramount importance more tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in spite of, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31164383562 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93399227311 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630136986301 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5302009973 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.25 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4166666667 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188449352466 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608876930123 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529969000727 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102254062432 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188963251033 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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