People believe that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are the most successful. Discuss both and give your opinion.
There are two suggestions of defining success, which has captured significant public attention. People believe that individuals with lucrative incomes are the most successful, while others argued that they are teachers and doctors who make their great contribution to society. In my opinion, the two approaches are both reasonable and accurate.
On the one hand, successful individuals are those who make a lot of money for several reasons. First, in terms of economy, if they are leaders or founders of larger companies, they are factors of reducing the rate of unemployment by creating occupational opportunities for citizens through their recruitment. Moreover, in terms of entertainment, for example, a famous entertainer could lift people's moods with his comedic performance that teachers and doctors could not help. Therefore, people could get their higher state of well-being in their hectic lives. Finally, the more money individuals can earn, the more they tend to spend, which is conducive to raise local businesses.
On the other hand, teachers and doctors are regarded as the most successful and respectful people due to their enormous contribution to their society. First, teachers play an essential role in delivering knowledge to young generations, raising children to become well-educated individuals. Besides, doctors are groups of people who work in medical institutes to cure and take care of people's health. For example, during the covid 19 pandemic, they are first responders and the most dedicated people, maintaining health safety to the whole nation.
In conclusion, teachers, doctors, and wealthy individuals are all successful in their field and contribute to society to some extend.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll-being in their hectic lives. Finally, the more money individuals can earn, the...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...field and contribute to society to some extend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59923664122 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98561368076 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603053435115 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8391737278 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.846153846 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313635490599 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107312712777 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999115388292 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193541095522 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061699055156 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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