Travellind is away that people used to do for derease stress of hard live. Whether travelling to foreign country to tourist attraction or just to quiet place where they enjoy. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some people like to go to quiet place, because, they thing itis easy and dose not need long time or much money. But, to me. I preferb to go to the vtourist attraction to release from life impact. In the following essay.I will elaborate on a couple reason to explain my point of view in this subjects.
First, the important reason come to my mide. Traveling with tourist group is convenience to me. This is due to the fact that, when doing so . I will be ebale to know more about these placese, since tourist companies alwayes hire expert person to travel with passanger. This person aware about important placese that should be visited, especialy historical placese. This is acompelling example from my real life. I am passionate with histerocal placesv like museums. Last summer I went to Paris with tourist company. that make my comfortable. This is mainly because, this company prepare every thing. Hotel, resturants, and very amazing places. Therefore, I just follow guider instructions without any thing distruct me. Because every things are alrady prepered.This example explain to us why travel withb tourst company is convenient.
In addation, go to tourist attraction give me opportunity to know new people from different countries. This make me do new friends with different skills. Hence I can increase my information and knowledege by shre skills between as. moreover, they may help me to find job. for example in my previous travel. I met Sara, who is a dentist, We became a closely friend, After we return back, she offer me to work with her as a dental assistant.
In conclusion. I believe travelling by tourist is more benefecial to me. This is based on previous expositions that mentioned above
Travellind is away that people used to do for derease stress of hard live. Whether travelling to foreign country to tourist attraction or just to quiet place where they enjoy. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some people like to go to quiet place, because, they thing itis easy and dose not need long time or much money. But, to me. I preferb to go to the vtourist attraction to release from life impact. In the following essay.I will elaborate on a couple reason to explain my point of view in this subjects.
First, the important reason come to my mide. Traveling with tourist group is convenience to me. This is due to the fact that, when doing so . I will be ebale to know more about these placese, since tourist companies alwayes hire expert person to travel with passanger. This person aware about important placese that should be visited, especialy historical placese. This is acompelling example from my real life. I am passionate with histerocal placesv like museums. Last summer I went to Paris with tourist company. that make my comfortable. This is mainly because, this company prepare every thing. Hotel, resturants, and very amazing places. Therefore, I just follow guider instructions without any thing distruct me. Because every things are alrady prepered.This example explain to us why travel withb tourst company is convenient.
In addation, go to tourist attraction give me opportunity to know new people from different countries. This make me do new friends with different skills. Hence I can increase my information and knowledege by shre skills between as. moreover, they may help me to find job. for example in my previous travel. I met Sara, who is a dentist, We became a closely friend, After we return back, she offer me to work with her as a dental assistant.
In conclusion. I believe travelling by tourist is more benefecial to me. This is based on previous expositions that mentioned above
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Suggestion: That
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Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...just follow guider instructions without any thing distruct me. Because every things are a...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Message: You used an adverb ('closely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('friend') instead of another adjective.
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...osely friend, After we return back, she offer me to work with her as a dental assista...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93272171254 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69669244332 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620795107034 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.034230796 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 57.6071428571 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.6785714286 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.82142857143 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348721654818 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797773712885 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115271345143 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220785839158 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218027912904 0.0645574589148 338% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.13 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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