You have recently attended a work related course Write a letter to your manager and say What course was it and when did you take it What did you like about it What improvements can be made in the future

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You have recently attended a work-related course. Write a letter to your manager and say
– What course was it, and when did you take it?
– What did you like about it?
– What improvements can be made in the future?

Dear Sir,
I am a regular employee of the company working in Human Resource Department. I have recently taken a workshop on Finance and management Relations organized by the organisation itself. I will like to brief you about the course and its possible use in the betterment of this office and the improvements which can be made for the future benefits.
Firstly, the company needs more awareness about financial assets and its utilisation. Secondly, more information and technology will likely improve the longevity of this organisation. It seems this course has all the necessary tools and perspectives which peaked my interest to participate in this. it appears that my decision was fruitful as in my opinion this 6 weeks training helped me in finding all the things that were required without compromising my office hours. The six exercises each week seems to be focusing on all the aspects of corporate handling and financial management.
I think it was the best thing which happened to me and I am thankful to the company for this and the sponsors also for such a great opportunity. I noticed some improvements could be made.
It seems all the office people gathered their were not very attentive as the electricity issue was their when the presentation was going on as far as I'm concerned it needs improvements. Furthermore, more practical or on the job techniques are needed rather than just only power point presentation. I believe this suggestions can be a game changer for us to achieve more success in this course.
I hope more workers will participate in this for improvement in their work and efficiency.
Thanking You,
XYZ

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: WILL_LIKE_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'would'?
Suggestion: would
...organized by the organisation itself. I will like to brief you about the course and ...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ked my interest to participate in this. it appears that my decision was fruitful a...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...the presentation was going on as far as Im concerned it needs improvements. Furthe...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nly power point presentation. I believe this suggestions can be a game changer for u...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir work and efficiency. Thanking You, XYZ
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.85567010309 311% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 937.175257732 146% => OK
No of words: 275.0 206.0 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98909090909 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9713474696 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 127.690721649 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589090909091 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 290.88556701 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1129781955 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4666666667 76.5299724578 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 4.34317383033 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168178515236 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629822162149 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651245200372 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962725853313 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850316405085 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 41.2886597938 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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