Since the 21st century is commenced, people are suffering more from many hazardous diseases, and it is believed that providing education on health issues has become prominent aspect on everyone's life. I, indeed, agree with this statement.
There are several reasons why health education is essential for people. The main cause is that healthy food is not consumed nowadays as many people have not aple of time to prepare home made food.In other word, people are occupied with hectic schedule due to which they like to have ready made food stuffs like fastfood which is normally available in every part of the world, and it leads to obesity among people that further creates other problems like breathing. For example, a survey revealed that more than 80% employees working in banks are eating street food in their lunch time; consequently, heath education should be provided to them.
Another reason would be that the majority of people donot do exercises regularly. To explain it, due to the advancement of technology, telework has been common these days, employees spend more time on screem, plus they do not need to visit office, besides it their physical affords has been also reduced because of newly launched machines. For instance, a headline published in ' moscow Times' described that even since smartphones has been established, a huge number of children love to pass their time while playing games on it ,whereas merely 10% of them are involving into outdoor activities. As a result, they should be taught about detrimental effects of such technical gadgets by adding an additional subject in their curriculum.
In conclusion, needless to say, lack of physical activities and consumimg unhealthy food decrease life expectancy of people. Hince, i firmly believe that subject related to health should be mandatory in every corner of the world.
- Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments Give some examples based on your own experience 78
- Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments Give some examples based on your own experience 78
- Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care this was not so in the past wat may be the root cause of this behaviour Discuss the reason and possible 86
- Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments Give some examples based on your own experience 84
- These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, if, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1561461794 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5669864711 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641196013289 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.8822657474 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.090909091 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3636363636 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137161850175 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626280646741 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726145625287 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861520376662 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481848034284 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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