Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
Many people argue that students do not have much knowledge about working environment and they should spend short time working beside studying at school . Personally I completely agree with this view . While nobody can deny the importance of academic subjects , I think teenagers should also have working experience .
There are two main reasons why working experiences are vital to students . One reason is that knowledge that they gain from doing practical job will help them live up to the employer’s expectation . Without working regularly students cannot understand what they need to do . Therefore , even if they only do part time job , teenagers are still able to gain some essential skills such as : problem solving , time management , working as a team … Another reason is that students will receive valuable real life experiences . By working on a daily basis , they get to know more about the world outside of school , how to deal with unexpected situations . Not only does it help them further in their work but it also offer students practical proficiencies for their job in the future .
Although students should be encouraged to spend short time working , academic subjects remained a fundamental needs for their education . Only school can provide them a good range of specialized knowledge . By giving lectures to students , teachers can help them increase their academic understanding , develope student’s imagination and creativity , improve their analytical thinking that play a leading role in their future job .
In conclusion , for the reasons that I have mentioned above , I strongly believe that schools ought to give students chances to do their job apart from studying theoretical subjects so as to provide them a more thoroughly education .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, while, apart from, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32490974729 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85260722642 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584837545126 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8570275877 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.461538462 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.01903807615 677% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307845871963 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120408961745 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897843751513 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199065289834 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098563243372 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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