Some people say that the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?
The financial situation has recently become a controversial topic among the people to the extent that many individuals suggest that it is money that plays a key role in one's life happiness. However, financial wellness might contribute to our lives, giving all credits to wealthiness for bringing the utmost happiness may appear unrealistic.
To embark on, I believe the central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, having enough money would provided peoples with a plethora of entertainments. Nowadays, there are plenty of games and hobbies which requires a considerable amount of money in order to be able to participate. for instance, activities such as sky diving, scuba diving or even some sports like golf are arguably expensive owing to their necessary equipment. Secondly, being in a top financially position, allow one to have more comfortable life which has a direct impact on happiness. it is obvious, that the more comfortable life we have the more happy we are. For example, in case of travel, wealthiness provide us many options from taking the commercial flights to taking a private jet that can take one to the designated destination in shortest time and without any delay that might happen in normal commercial flights.
Although money would be able to improve and enhance one's life, there are other activities that can lead a person to feel happier. One of the most important part of each individual that might have direct influence on happiness degree is their dream job. Many people recently are unhappy with what their doing to the fact that they have not had the chance to follow their dreams. Changing the current and unsatisfying job and taking steps toward the dream work, definitely make people more satisfied with themselves and the more they achieve the happier they become.
To conclude, having a lot of money might help one to have more comfortable life or costly hobbies, however, when it comes to more important things like family and health the wealthiness is not the priority.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding your reque...
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Suggestion:
...am writing to you regarding your request a feedback on the cookery course which I...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in case there was any misunderestandin. it also gave us the oppertunity to make go...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest organizing'.
Suggestion: suggest organizing
...e your momentary indulgence in order to suggest to organize a new bakery course which I personally ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...Iranian citizens like cakes and candies, . I believe, these course would be mutual...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, so, still, then, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1091.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 240.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54583333333 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72245973104 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620833333333 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9800873044 44.8134815571 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.1 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 16.8248392259 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197392950315 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073454789914 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997116204168 0.0603063233224 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147251202753 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128830238206 0.0580467560999 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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