The graph below shows the proportion of the popuation aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The graph below shows the proportion of the popuation aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The given chart illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or more in various countries during a period of 100 years from 1940 to 2040. Overall, the proportion of elderly people increases in each country between 1940 and 2040. Japan is expected to see the most dramatic changes in its elderly population.
It can be seen from the graph, approximately 9% of Americans were 65 aged or over in 1940, compared to about 7% of Swedish people. The proportions of elderly people in the USA and Sweden rose gradually over the next 50 years, reaching just under 15% in 1990. By 2040, it is thought that roughly 25% of Swedish population will be 65 years old or over, while the figure for the USA will be slightly lower, at nearly 23%.
Looking the chart in more detail, the percentage of Japanese people were aged 65 or more fluctuated between 3% and 5%. There was a significant increase of 5% in the proportion of elderly people in Japan over the early 2000s. A sudden increase in the percentage of elderly population is predicted for Japan, with a jump of over in just 10 years from 2030 to 2040. By 2040, it is thought that around 27% of Japanese population will be 65 years old or more.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...llustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or more in various countries during ...
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Suggestion:
... over the early 2000s. A sudden increase in the percentage of elderly population ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52093023256 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54059097216 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.7111310951 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.2 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.23603664747 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274103767047 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119217300794 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760660377057 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201761823078 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380690400612 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...llustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or more in various countries during ...
^^
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trates the percentage of people aged 65 or more in various countries during a pe...
^^
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... over the early 2000s. A sudden increase in the percentage of elderly population ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52093023256 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54059097216 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.7111310951 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.2 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.23603664747 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274103767047 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119217300794 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760660377057 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201761823078 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380690400612 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.