Virtual reality has been a major breakthrough in technology. However, like the advent of smartphones, many people have become so engrossed in it that they tend to ignore the outside world. How far would you agree or disagree? What can we do to alleviate such problems?
It is arguable that the advent of virtual reality has considerably made a great number of people becoming absorbed in it and tend to be indifferent to outside society. From my perspective, there are both advantages and disadvantages.
To begin with, being adventitious with enormous innovativeness in techonology has clearly widened the door to the most advanced civilization in near future. It is an important step in technologically developing progress and thus an excellent example represented for outstanding human intelligence as well as our eagerness to contribute. Furthermore, it is also recognized as a notable success of creation. Secondly, by experiencing virtual reality, people find it more thrilled and easier to travel through any where they dream of. As can be seen, some individuals hardly afford to entertain themselves since travelling would cost plenty, therefore giving virtual reality products a try may help them be less bored. To exemplify, COVID-19 pandemic has been spreading more and more horribly, which is troublesome for outside activities. Within virtual reality, it is possible to drop by everywhere all over the globe and do anything you want. As a consequence, people's desires get satisfied fully in various ways.
Notwithstanding, those who are consistently engrossed in virtual reality products possibly would form a sedentary lifestyle, found and claimed to be one of the worst habits need rectifying. Becoming less active could lead to sluggishness in daily routine, hence resulted in indifference of youngsters nowadays, such as the prior generations are getting ignored or less interaction between social relationships means to happen. Even though human is inextricably linked, it is likely to varient sometimes whenever society voice its own demand to reconstruct our initial relationships so as not to be too listless. Moreover, addicting to virtual reality particularly and technology in general, would be gradually overdependent. As a consequence, people might become more ignorant, detached and unwilling to explore. In addition, some parents tend to reward their children with virtual reality games, which gives a rise to more arguments in parenting morality. Some believe that the children should not be exposed to such high-technological products this early whereas other claim it could bring them better knowledge.
Certainly, we cannot abolish virtual reality completely as well as lead people to become so absorbed. It requires each individual has their own commitment to replace their lifetyles with a better one. Virtual reality is slightly similar to other virtual games, so keep imagining that you are playing your favourite battles to some accepted extent. You can set a 30-minute countdown for your game each day and spend time doing regular excercise or gossiping with your family and friends. Parents can ask for help from some relevant counselors. Carefully observe your children and don't mind being thrilled to play with them. By doing so, they would prefer associating outside.
On the whole, virtual reality do has its own advantages and disadvantages. No technological services are worth being to blame for and we must need to learn how to control our using frequency.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in general, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the whole, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2833.0 1615.20841683 175% => OK
No of words: 521.0 315.596192385 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43761996161 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07729444844 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 176.041082164 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589251439539 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 887.4 506.74238477 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9120358631 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.961538462 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0384615385 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.96153846154 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2529816736 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626624417675 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483645541494 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141675866845 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214647744921 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 78.4519038076 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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