Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The issue topic states that students should give more emphasis on picking some worthy goals. Students at a particular time in their life have heard that ‘follow your dreams’ but for the most of the students, their dreams always remain imaginary and most of the time end-up struggling for some other worthy goal.
Every student in his/her young age aspires to become something in his/her life. Some might dream to be a doctor, engineer, astronaut, actor, singer, dancer, etc., Dreams such as to become a doctor or an engineer is considered to be worthy enough and the society supports such dreams. But the children dreaming about becoming a singer, an eloquent dancer, etc., such dreams are not considered to be worthy enough and such students/ children are forced to pickup some worthy goal such as doctor or an engineer.
As the children grow, their liking change and might be their dream also changes and after few years they are concrete about their dream and what they want to pursue in their life. Some young minds, have a selfish dream of only defaming some other person and to make them feel like they are unworthy enough by just being better than them. Such thoughts should be stopped.
However, the issue statement has some points that should also be considered and looked upon. Sometimes by pursing our dreams we cannot fulfill the requirements of our life, in such cases students should try to give more emphasis on a career because of which they can fulfill their needs and also give time to pursue their dream. Many people achieve substantially but it is not always the same for everyone.
Although, to some extent I agree with the statement because even if everyone wants to achieve their dream goal, sometimes it is not possible and this is the harsh fact many might have to face. So, from the points I have stated above I think that everyone should decide depending on the situation they are in.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 169, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
...not possible and this is the harsh fact many might have to face. So, from the points I hav...
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Line 8, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...depending on the situation they are in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, as to, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81325301205 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24998185506 2.79657885939 80% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509036144578 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2774687698 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.923076923 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227219889944 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856595047789 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363002992403 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129864009601 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231299358405 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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