Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There has been a controversy about connecting to mobile phones in children for a long period of time. While some people view that teachers should give children a permission to use their phones at school. Personally, I am of the opinion that it is better to prevent them from this trend as soon as possible.
One argument put forward to support the view that learning via phones provide children with a myriad of merits. Firstly, children can benefit from the opportunity to cut the expenses from spending money on learning tools such as books, handouts,... This is mainly because electronic devices are excellent tools to store information, seen in the way children can take advantage of their phones to save documents instead of carrying their heavy bags. Secondly, mobile phones offer people several learning platforms which can boost children's self-learning ability. It is clear that children these days are prone to become more independent in knowledge acquisition. Therefore, online learning tools such as Quizlet, Doulingo,... designed with lots of visual animations play a pivotal role in engaging chidren to their schooling.
There are many convincing arguments in favor of banning smart phones during the school day. One of the primary reasons is that helping children to stop overexposing to many state-of-the-art devices. It is commonly believed that we are leading a sedentary lifestyle in which we do less or even no physical activities, especially chidren who are likely to access to their phones most of the time at home. For example, instead of permitting children to use their phones, teachers can increase more time speding on extracurricular activities. Therefore, not only will it enhance their fine motor skills through sports such as: football, basketball,... but also urge them to intergrate into social communication, seen in the way they interact with their peers on a regular basis.
In conclusion, imposing regulation also depends on school's opinion. From my personal perspective, it is necessary for children to be prohibited because of more potential consequences. Society should ensure that steps are taken to prevent this problem from deteriorating further.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35260115607 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95585482571 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601156069364 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8703971635 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4736842105 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36374255886 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981736682835 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851571051689 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215852659781 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704219044071 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.