Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Some think that people nowadays spend money on clothing in order to have a good outlook. However, others state otherwise. They agree that people spend money on entertainment to feel the pleasure of life. In my opinion, as people are feeling depress because the pressure of the work, they end up spending a huge amount of money on entertainment. I feel this way as I will talk over in this article.
First of all, people currently are overwhelmed by the amount of work they need to work on. Sometimes, they end up working more than they are supposed to work and this results in feeling depress and having to spend almost the entire salary in entertainment in order to get over workload. For example, when we finish working, the boss always startles us with more work to be done and this may cause us to feel overwhelmed by the amount of work to do. Therefore, this example elucidates the desideratum of spending money on entertainment to surpass the depression of the job.
Moreover, in Brazil it is usual to see people having fun and entertained themselves with drinks and stuff related to pleasure. For instance, in north of Brazil it is common to notice people drinking beers in bars and parties in the week days. This is not to say that they do not work, instead they work part-time and the rest they enjoy life drinking and having pleasure and under no circumstances do they spend money on clothing because they are not used to getting dressed at all. Thus, this instance clarifies that people do not spend money with appearance.
Finally, I strongly support the idea that people are devoted to entertainments and enjoying life with pleasure than pay attention on appearance because they feel too much pressure at work nowadays that they would rather enjoying themselves with beers and parties than any other thing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'enjoy'
Suggestion: enjoy
...at work nowadays that they would rather enjoying themselves with beers and parties than ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76898734177 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60916714002 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487341772152 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3553515215 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.642857143 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198726045156 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873679622365 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715679734463 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138578726338 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044569145981 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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