149-Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish.
It is not always very easy to choose something that you would like to do with a land, if you have many wishes. Fist of all I would say that in my decision it will be absolutely very important to consider if the land is given to me as a gift, for good or just for a temporary use. There are also a lot of other small things that could influence my decision, as the size of the land, the location e.t.c. Without knowing any of these details, I will have to choose something that it will work in any case. So, if somebody will give me a land to use I will use it as a vegetable garden. In the following paragraphs I will give some arguments that will support my option.
First of all, I always wanted to have a garden but since we are renting a house we could not do that because of the landscaping of our neighborhood. It is a very nice place but doesn't give me the opportunity to have a garden. If,somebody will give me a land to use it, that will make one of my dreams come true because I love gardening. For instance this summer I tried to plant some tomatoes in a flowerpot. That was like a joke and I realize that a growing tomatoes or other vegetables in a flowerpot can not be compare with a real garden.
Having your own little garden involves a lot of work but it is worthy not only because is cheaper, but the vegetables from your garden are always fresh and have a better taste. For example my parents have a big garden, so when we visit them I always like to eat tomatoes picked up by myself. I like them so much that sometimes I would just stick them in my mouth without even wash them. I can do that just because I know that my dad let the vegetable to grow natural he doesn't put any solutions on them and because of that their taste is unique.
Last but not at least using the land as a garden bring me advantages but also to the person that gave me the land to use. If the land is just for a temporary use it is very easy to change the use of a land from a garden to something else that the owner might need or want. For example if I know from the beginning that I will use the land just for a determined period of time of course it would not be a wise idea to build something on it, don't you agree?
To conclude everything I stated above, I believe that using a land as a garden is the best option in case somebody gives me this opportunity it will not only make one my dreams come true and bring me the advantages of having fresh and tasty veggies but it will also make it easy for the owner to change the use of the land in case he want it or need it back.
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Sentence: To conclude everything I stated above, I believe that using a land as a garden is the best option in case somebody gives me this opportunity it will not only make one my dreams come true and bring me the advantages of having fresh and tasty veggies but it will also make it easy for the owner to change the use of the land in case he want it or need it back.
Description: The fragment he want it is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace want with verb, past tense
flaws:
No. of Words: 521 350 (less words in real exams. write the essay in half an hour)
You need to change your writing style on essay body:
YOU: reasons + examples
Correct way: reasons + why this reasons(arguments) + examples + conclusions. and examples should be shorter.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 521 350
No. of Characters: 2022 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.778 4.7
Average Word Length: 3.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.196 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.542 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5